A reincarnation story with a twist, I like it! Can't wait to see what happens next! Also, excellent spelling and grammar, that's a rare attribute on this site :)
In my opinion, the cover and the title are a little bit plain and the prologue is too short and didn't hook me quite much. I saw similar things like this before, about the adventure from the weak being to the god-like being or stuff. I read five chapters, I could say the writing style is quite nice, the character Rufus is really great. The plot and the setting of the world are quite decent.Keep up writing, author. You did great so far.
While it can feel repetitive in the sense of their reactions after he beats the ghosrt, seems like a copy paste of "So he was that powerful, i must not offend this man" and "Too bad blah blah, then what he said next surprised them". However everything else is amazing and this is just short of a masterpiece because of that one problem. Looking forward to see mcs background, is he the creator? I guess i need to finish the novel to tell.
This Novel Deserve a Good Rating. I don't how i get here but once i started reading it got me hooked. Already completed all available Chapters.it is One of the best novel out there but idk why it's not in the Ranking. Its a True hidden gem.
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Although I have seen like 10 books similar to this, this is also a different ability for the same concept. Do you even understand all that mumbo jumbo talk btw.
Basically I said still the same color but a different shade
I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS NOVEL TO YOU ALL.
I just read one chapter and it's good . Better than mine .. This novel is fresh with a new concept if the author didn't mess up than it can also come in top 25. No kidding. Everyone should read it. Keep going author. You can do it. I believe in you. Don't Give up. You can do it...
Keep it up I would love for this novel to continue updating in the future
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It don’t deserve 5 stars but it’s the best story of this week so be it.
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Trial Read Review (only from synopsis):
(IOHOSBICPAHTTP) - So this guy is in a world where this virtual game can merge with reality. He levels up one skill (the fireball, supposably) and it becomes super OP that it can literally blast a hole through the earth. Honestly, can’t see much potential in this one. It’s like any other virtual reality power and does not seem to have much diversity in its plot. This will have to go in my maybe read list.
(1MTDBIABT) - Guy gets doomsday system one month before doomsday. This sounds like an interesting plot with some potential (I hope). All I wish for is it to not be like on of those trashy apocalyptic novels.I will put this on my read list for now.
(MCCIE) - Guy dies then his conscience goes into an eyeball. It can evolve and whatnot and he gets OP. If I’m being honest about this novel, I’m not feeling good vibes. It sounds like one of those grindy novels with no actual plot. Oh well, I will check it out.
(ICVCA) - Guy transmigrates but can see the stats of other humans. Whoopee do. What a fun plot (that definitely has not been used many times before). I honestly am sick of these types of novels. But who knows? Maybe this one will be good (not placing my bets on it).
(OG:IAAPP) - This plot is basically like the first one excet that he gets the privileged player system which allows him to get more EXP and more things in general. I honestly can not get why so many writers follow this plot. It has been overused too many times. I will maybe read this one (if I get super bored).
(EHFS) - Protag gets four skills. But so does everyone else. This is the synopsis. That’s all.
(CC:ITWMS) - If you have read my reviews before, you will know I like sect/clan/company or whatever building novels. This is one of those except that he has his smartphone which can do many things. Google maps makes him see the terrain, banking system lets him exchange currency, ect. This is one I will definitely read.
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I have to say, the concept of the author is truly amazing! I really like how the story progresses by killing someone that the MC (Akio). Love that part! Will surely read more of your novel, mate!
I do have some few points to point out. The story you wrote mostly has "telling" and few "Showing". It would be awesome if you could describe Aiko's facial expression, how his heart skipped a beat after seeing his parents dead, or the pain surging from his skin. These things helps us, reader, to imagine the scene more than saying they were covered in blood.
Although the informal introduction was a bit funny, in formal writing (writing a book), that technique might appear odd. I don't know if this part is a matter of perspective, but I think sticking to formalities such as telling the character from someone else (another character) or an identification card (a subtle introduction) would be preferred than saying it on the spot.
Lastly, there are some dialogue tags such as "An old man was seen talking to me." might appear correct, but in a dialogue tag, it sounds confusing. A simple "An old man walked up and said." would do its job since "said" is an invisible dialogue tag. There are few dialogues such as "Can you not." Spoken by the main character might appear force. Although that might appear witty, I think something like "Are you mocking me!" might show anger and hatred towards the creature imitating his parents before they died would bring more emotions.
Kudos for the author!