This story is really good and each new chapter I read makes me look forward to the next one, moreover rate of publication is high while giving quality chapters. Thank you for sharing your history with us.
Okay, I read some chapters but for some reason, I cannot establish a clue about what your story is really about.TLDR, here are my strengths and weaknesses for your novel.Strengths: Unique genre. Good representation of the premise.Weaknesses: No knowledge of plot structure. Lack of description of what the story is all about along with scenes.I know for a fact that this novel falls under the sports genre, so I was expecting fast-paced action scenes of the players or something similar. I didn’t see any of it in the first chapter.I suggest describing the scenes (for example, describe the office’s appearance) and adding context to your chapters. When making chapters, there needs to be an objective of what you are trying to portray to the audience. You need to convince people to read your book.I tried to understand some characters, like Jeff, for example being the boss, but for some reason I cannot flip the page because I keep reading scenes without any context of what it is all about.Also, please improve your book title, so I can have a clear picture of what your book stands for.I appreciate your desire to represent the world of sports in novels, but for now I just can’t read the rest of it because of it lacking a clear foundation of what it is about.But you shouldn’t give up. Sports isn’t my thing, but knowing you want to represent it through your novel is making me want to read more. That is, if you revamp/rewrite your book.Good luck on your writing journey by the way, and feel free to message me in the forums should you have any questions.
I appreciate how much people read my novels despite being that short of collections but It doesn't matter to me because I just like what I'm do
I must applaud the author for such a refreshing novel. this is a nice piece and I can see it going really far.I've read only 5 chapters thus far but it still is quite amazing how I'm drawn into the world with ease. looking forward to more exciting chapters as I read on a few grammatical errors to take care of and that's the only problem i have with the work.nice one author ?
Please excuse my poor english,This is the second starbound fanfic i've ever read, and if you're tired of those wuxia, cultivator, and those narcissistic prick then i shall say this novel may be perfect for you. And don't worry if you not familiar with the lore or never play starbound before, the author kindly covered and explained it all (and chucklefish may gain another starbound player).So far, The story is following the canon, with a bit spice of lore and interstellar conflict. And i can't be amazed of how underrated this novel is, i mean it's not everyday you can read sci-fi fanfic in this website.But to be honest, starbound lore is full of hole, the overpowered personal warping and teleportation, the races background, device mechanism, and i hope the author explain the outpost in details, i mean a dimensional HUB is should be gigantic, sprawling cities, advanced ship in the port, armory of advanced tech, or maybe that's why they call it "outpost". I think The author should add his own lore, or fill it with crossover or better yet maybe mods, i'm sure it will give him the idea to progress the story other than the canon. Other than that it's all good, just need a bit of realism. And i love this novel, hope you the best.I don't mean to act bossy, and cocky. But if you found this review offending then please send me letter, i will apologize properly.
Nice book. The concept is interesting, and most especially the ending parts of chapter one caught my attention, leaving me with a crave for more. Good work author.
Author, don't you dare drop this. Because now I'm really addicted to this.
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Fuck "140 Characters"
welcome back after few month i waitingnow new chapter has been release so i hope can read it every day after this if you not very busy i like when read it ecspecially tianchen because i love he character and i hope him be happy life and also be super power to protect himself and another person who he care about
I really like the plot of the story, continue with the chapters, I hope I can read more of it, please upload more chapters since we are quarantined in some countries, you can also do a mass release
A very good novel. -