Great story! and the first chapter is very interesting. Apart from that, there is a lot of progress to be made grammar wise but as long as you keep writing you will improve.Good luck author!
The author writes much of the story in passive voice. It makes it feel like you're not present for anything. We don't experience the story though the narrative POV, but we're told it in the most boring way.There are inconsistencies with the narrative distance and focus. For instance, sometimes you get told how someone else thinks, despite it not being established its omniscient POV.One thing that bothers the most is: What is his motivation?If the goal is to do a vlog, why does he do it? Money? Its clear vlogging becomes pointless after the first 20 chapters. So at the end of the day, the idea behind this story is a cheap hook to get you reading. Then it turns into the typical wish fulfilment trash.
It was really good, interesting. The story was brought up well I mean presentation was damn good.The awareness in the main character to be responsible and creative is adorable
This novel apparently will be promising. I read until chapter 40 and I didn't had any issue, althought I can't understand about translation quality (because my English is not the better) all the others parts seems good. The start isn't a cliche and the characters are not bad. if something very bad doesn't happen in the course of history, this will probably be a good novel
I really like the book but it definitely could use a better story plot after the first 30 or so chapters. I also think the updating should be a lot more stable especially when you are doing online books. I mean it's been 10 months since it's been updated and to be perfectly honest with the current state of the book it's not worth it to spend coins on it until it gets updated with at least 50 more chapters at the minimum. Now, no I'm not hating on the author or the book but from a realistic standpoint it's not worth it
This feels like a unique take on an extremely saturated market, I’m excited learning about how the class system works, I’ve never seen anything like it before.The writing is pretty good, and it seems the story will involve uncovering secrets and exploring the world instead of just being exclusively non-stop combat like every other vrmmorpg novel I’ve read. Which makes sense to me, because if it’s supposed to be this new world that is indistinguishable from real life, you would obviously explore and engage with it, not just mindlessly grind like your usual rpg game on pc.I’m looking forward to more chapters from you, good work!
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The story from the start is good but I need to see more chapters so that I can add my honest thoughts about it.The only sad thing is slow updates.
I think your story is very creative, mostly the background is interesting. I like your writing style. Hope to read more. Keep up with your amazing work Author.
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very good novel.will recommend if you want a evil MC.
Loved the novel and mc's attitude toward the 'NPCs'. A bit sad that it ended this abruptly without him taking the final step. But it really was an enjoyable journey........