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It started off real nice, but as time went on it became more and more frustrating to continue reading. How can a person be so submissive and have such idiotic way of thinking?!
I understand the premise of him being dependent on his master for both protection and system points, but the way let's both his master and all the others treat him makes me want to puke.
Even his own disciple treats him like shit!!!
Overall it started off nice(the first 20 chapters), the it went downhill real fast!!!
definitely don't recommend it!
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One of the best virtual reality novel.
sicko
Awesome read! There's only three chapters so far but the world and the characters are beautifully painted (or war-painted). I'm a sucker for wars on paper, both steel-armed and political. And I can't wait to get to the latter. Also excited on what will become of Cornelius and Commodus.
Only reason I didn't give full marks was the shifting tenses. But that can be easily remedied. I'd suggest to pick one and stick to it throughout. It's minor though and only slightly took me away from the fantasy. I hope this comment doesn't come off as harsh criticism but as fellow advice from a fellow author to another.
Advice aside, this story was a breath of fresh air. I'd done some review swaps but I like your story the most so far. I'll put your story in my collection, not for the sake of it but because I'm already invested in where the author will take me. Kudos to you and keep up the great work!
**: Haven't played Total War yet but because of your story, I might just give it a go :)
I truly like this novel. I'm enjoying it. I hope the author doesn't drop this.
Great story bro. I love these types of novels with a bad ass Mc. Your world building is out of this world to. Keep it up bro because I like it.
Heyo Readers,
Seven here [Shameless Review]
Well it's my second novel on wn, and if you have read my first one, then you must know how much Innocent of a writer I am
very very very very good boo....but need more chapter......a loot more.........................................................................
I havent read much just about 5-7 chapters, but some parts doesnt make sense.1st in the story he chooses ranger, but he has a blade slash ability instead of something bow related.2nd the story says that rangers have high damage and high speed, but he only got two points in agility when he leveled up twice and he was getting 5 stats for his vitality which Rangers are suppose to be weak in. So unless he can assign stat points, this is pretty weird to say the least. Another reason could be that one point of agility weighs more than one point in vitality.(Like the bonus is more significant)
the story is very nice with an innovative and interesting idea, I really like that there is finally a story where there are other races, the only thing is that everyone has a system, mc has a good and coherent character, the dialogues they are good, this is more of a soft read there is not a lot of action