Just gonna put this review here.
Also, to those who plan to read this, give up, you'll only get blue balled because novel was dropped, author no longer updates it.
Its alright for your first attempt. Keep it up for I liked it. Just don't drop it.
Be stable. I think you lack the ability to explain an event pretty clearly and in a stable way. But I think you can improve it after some period.
I think that you don't make grammatical mistakes and your writing is alright.
NINJA
A fantasy name that filled every kid that watches Naruto Anime.
This is not Naruto fanfic but it gives it vibes. the novel took a little serious path and also enjoyable.
it's a story of strong Ninja that Travel back in time after the defeats of Human kinds by the Notorious 75 Demons lord.
But the good thing about the Novel is that, the defeat is course by the humans themselves. It's shows that if humanity has not fallen to depravity and kill themselves their power will be enough to withstand the Demons attack.
But, Greed for Power and other depravity that human fall into, it's what makes them be destroyed.
With all above explanation, you will see the novel will take a different approach in solving the problem. it's not about just improving the humanity's power, as they are already strong, But rather about uniting them together. Well this is my hypothesis. Since it's only three chapter maybe something change.
It's a very good read.
As I was reading I was pleasantly surprised by the easy flow of the story. It's easy to read and I didn't have to go over the same sentence/paragraph twice to understand what the author was trying to say. There is good pacing, and the paragraphs were nicely aligned. It tells me that the author has already grasped the basics of writing and has the potential for improvement in the future. The author should give themselves a pat in the back. Now for the cons:
For most new writers when writing in the first person POV they do tend to overuse inner monologues as opposed to utilizing gestures and facial expressions as hints to the character's inner turmoils. Verbs such as frowning, smirking can also indicate mood. I would also like to see more active sentences rather than passive ones; it makes me more emotionally engaged.
Overall it is a very good story and a worthwhile read. Other than the writing which has room for growth, the character development, world-building, and plot progression is intriguing and makes you hooked onto the story. Good job!
This is a great fun adventure read. I don't know what that other reviewer is whinging about the protagonist being annoying. I found him hilarious. His personality makes this story much more humorous and refreshing than your average webnovel. Also had to feel for the poor guy, hated by his own shoddy parents for apparently bringing them bad luck. I can fully understand him hating them and being happy they're dead. I enjoyed reading his adventures in the fictional world he soon finds himself in. Here's hoping he pulls through and makes the hot girl his wife haha. From a technical standpoint, the writing is of a good quality with minimal typos and the prose flows nicely. I highly recommend this to anyone looking for a good fun adventure story with plenty of humor.
This was a pretty well written novel so far. Even though the explanation of the sectors and portals and everything was a bit sparse for my tastes, I can understand why there aren't more. The characters are very well done and the system even has a teacher. All in all, a job well done. Look forward to seeing more!
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This is very good and I like that the story starts right away. I also like that the character seems well developed and we can see how the character thinks from the onset. I think this is a really good book and I can't wait for other chapters. good luck to the author!
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Starts great but gets very repetitive over time. Not unsual for its genre, but if you are someone who doesnt like repetitive things then this isnt for you. Finished using mtl(only 600+ chapters) and I can say that the ending was a little bit of a disapointment. It felt like the author didn't know how to further progress the story without having to copy paste from earlier chapters and thus abruptly ended it with a lack luster ending. Overall not bad if you are looking for a novel to pass time but don't expect something great.PS. No Harem/Romance! Yay!
Very generic and low quality writing. Nothing to remember about. Nothing to recommend.