Very interesting. I am intrigued in the sibling relationship and the MC's goals. I want to see what kind of plot the author has laid out.
Writing Quality: I can see the quality of the writing and that you try very hard to edit. There is still small grammar errors, but overall content was prestine. I do have a pet peave for authors who tell action words, instead of showing the action. (Example: Sigh, *cough cough)
Story Development: The pace of the story is perfect for this kind of genre.
Character Design: I can see Zuifan's personality vividly. Just wondering if Chunu will have a big role because she seems invisible to me. Perhaps give her more descriptions.
World Background: Good world building. So far the book is slowly explaining itself.
I definitely recommend this book it's a fun read. However, honestly I'm kinda annoyed that the author had the gall to say/ask for readers not to complain about the writing quality but instead point the mistakes out, and here the readers are pointing them out but even after a month or more few to none were addressed or fixed. IDK maybe it's just some that have slipped through the cracks but either way as a reader its kinda annoying.
Love the novel and I hope it gets a manga adaptation that would be cool and so awesome.
Please keep the work up author
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Hi and good evening or afternoon/morning
I have finally finished editing the first chapter of this book and let me just say it wasn't as easy as I thought it would be
Whoever thinks editing a book is easier that writing one doesn't know what he/she is talking about
Anyways, I'll really appreciate if you guys can just look through the new first chapter and tell me if it's better that before
At least I'll know I'm actually achieving something
Thank in advance,
Your Writer
it's very good, but why would you use Zoom as the book cover? He is a super-speed serial killer, he is the definition of evil; so evil the speed force punished him by making him the Black Flash, the Grim Reaper of speedsters.
Amazing story so far. It is well written and had interesting characters. There are a couple grammatical errors where the word he is used for a female character but this doesn't take away from the story in a massive way. I would highly recommend the story.
8 chapters in and haven’t been introduced to the necromancy and or undead. I understand we need to care about the parents but they are going to die so you shouldn’ waste so much time on them. Also the grammer is pretty mediocre at times. Non the less I’ interested in seeing where this is token.
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Great book, good grammar, nice plot, good world background. Amazing Characters and good updating stability.......Highly recommendable.......
The story is god so far and is not some generic stuff, that I'm happy about. Please continue with this bok and don't drop it author. Thank you.
Amazing work from the writer here. It's been a long time since I read a story like this and I love it. I love the creativity and everything about the book. Keep it up.