great kingsom building story. greeeeaaaaattt
the mc is extremely smart. /sjsndkkdkdkdnmdkdkdkdkdmdkdkdmdkdkdhdjdjdijdjcjcjfjfjfjfjfjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjsjdjdnjdjdjdkdkdkxkkxkxkckcckcckckckc
Read all the chapters in 3 days, have been enjoying it a lot.
Cool story, characters and world building, including kingdom building...
There are still some grammar errors and some caused by distraction but they have been diminishing so I don't really see a problem.
Only thing that i find a little annoying isn't the grammar errors but the punctuation ones, those are really important, if you could pay a little more attention to them, since they are really essential for the telling of a story and the reader's impression of it... would be a great boost to this novel.
In conclusion, great work, pls don't look at my criticism as somethhing bad because that wasn't my intention and keep on doing what you do.
You have something really good here, keep up :3
Cheers ;)
Well written, the MC’s personality was realistic and we got to see some of his inner workings. Consistent logic, well as much as can be when magic is involved. It was a bit of a leap at the end though. But very, very hot. 10/10 as an evening read
My name is Jeff
21
21
21
21
Speech 100
Big Chungus 69 420 Keanu Reeves Wholesome 100
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
It is alright I am only on chapter 10 but the plot seems the same as haikyuu but different names. Like two players dont like each other and suddenly they are in the same team? Idk the story is still decent I like the grammar but the paragraphs need to be more spaced. It feels like someone pressed enter randomly on the paragraphs I'm not saying you copied them but it feels similar to haikyu. It seems you get good feedback so its good.
For starters in business some ideas worth to think about. The life story of the author in brief description This is a personal insight based on the author experience..
Shameless author here :P. it's my first time writing a novel. The story will be a little slow paced at first so please bear with me. i have planned a long plot line so you will enjoy it. The mc is new to the cultivation world and is thus naive, but as he learns about it he will grow. Also i have not planned harem for this novel, there may be multiple women, and multiple children that he may have , but in the end he'll have a single girl he will stay with.
This is a work of mine, so I will greatly sing its praises. If you like epic xianxia and ultimate Dao fantasy, this work is for you. Packed with immortals, gods, divines, mortals, elementals, demons and so on. You are in for a big treat.
Hey there!Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact [email protected]. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Hey there!Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact [email protected]. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Im give this 5 stars after reading the description