Creative Writing skills .The story develops well throughout the chapters and the picture created is undeniably beautiful. Words that complement the story as a whole. A great read.
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Writing Quality: 3/5
Your writing is not bad but you have a few problems with punctuation, and a bit unnecessary wording.
Updating Stability: 5/5
I put everyone's like this.
Story Development: 4/5
The pacing of your story is good, please keep up with that. I like the plot developing, although I did tend to get a bit bored at times, but it did not stop me from fully leaving.
Character Design: 3.5/5 (I have to round to four on the thing)
I feel the MC to be a bit bland, but not all the bad as a character. I do like the other characters you added and how you give their personality through their dialogue.
World Background: 4/5
I enjoyed the first chapter the most in the sense of world building, you did a good job at painting a picture on your world.
In conclusion, the story is not bad, it is interesting but at the same time could get a bit boring. But getting past the boring part, the story is good. Keep up the good work, author.
This is better then all of the new trial reads that came out today except for My Post-Apocalyptic Shelter Levels Up Infinitely! which I enjoyed reading
this was indeed said and it sums my thoughts too about your book: I don't agree with those who commented before me. Why is the novel confusing? Why is it a mess?Maybe it is if you read a novel for preschoolers your whole life your brain cells die over time. I don't know, I just speculating. But it's a fact that if you don't use it you lose it. Maybe some ppl lost it.Anyway, this novel is simple. It's a sci-fi-type novel of intergalactic beings. A world with a very high level of technology.The protagonist was indeed sent back in time a week before the start of an intergalactic game that opens for menkind. This game seems to be the hope for the future of humanity and his beloved sister. He takes his knowledge from the future and makes the most out of it. What is interesting is that he does not have 100% of his memory and sometimes unforeseen things happen.Now my review.I like the story actually the author said it starts slow but to me, it's full of things that make me curious and it's not slow at all. for me slow is when a story is annoyingly boring, when nothing actually happens. The story is not a fighting everybody every second type of novel. which I like.90% of the story so far happens inside the game. But I know there is a world outside the game the author has not really touched upon yet.Now, this seems to also be a cultivation novel??? So I don't see where that is going to fit well in a sci-fi gaming environment that is my only concern about this novel because now everything is about stats and happens inside the game. So will it all turn onto the dao? Immortals? Flying on a sword and searching for the pinnacle of life? Going against the heavens? IDK? I have not gone too far yet for me to know that. I hope It does not become a Chinese face slapping showdown.
This story is annoying. Very annoying. The theme of magi is great. After all, Warlock of the Magus World gave hope to despairing Chinese novel scene. Giving us a new template of protagonists. But this story? It's irritating on so many levels. I'll just list them for simplicity's sake:1. The body's old will still remains in the body. Which is the rationale for MC making down-right idiotic choices. 2. Everytime someone needs help the MC will be reminded of someone he cares about. Chubby man? Reminds him of his father. Little girl? Reminds him of his little sister. Mean-spirited girl? Reminds him of his older sister. He uses these excuses to act like a shining beacon of righteousness. 3. Superificial MC. First heroine introduced wears a mask. After he sees her appearance for the first time...he moans to himself that he should've been nicer to her. Not only that, his impression of her went up by 1000x. 4. The cheat should've just been a memory palace. But in effect it acts like a deity tier artefact. MC hit by psychological attack? Blocked. MC hit by dream spell? Blocked. The cheat conveniently saves the MC from every little thing. 5. The MC has no idea how to use his cheat at all. Instead of gaining a foundation by reading books, he choses to spend his time trying to chat up beauties. Sigh.6. From time to time the MC will randomly preach socialist ideaologies. About how he believes there's non hierarchy in society et cetera. All in all...this protagonist doesn't deserve to be a magus.
Wait when did this exist ARE YOU CHEATING ON ME TANAKA AGAIN DIDNT I TELL YOU TO STOP AT LIKE THE 66th TIME UGH FINE LETS BREAK UP (Could you try a sword art online fanfic)
Thanks to the author for putting in the effort. It just so happens that it's not a cop of tea that would suit majority's taste.i think the stars covered all that I could think of rating this novel in.
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I really like it so far, please don't drop it ! EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp EXP exp exp