Great story really! Though I have a few major flaws to point out! First is plot development! It's too slow! Like super duper slow. Author created a very big world yet the story development is super slow! It would get boring as time goes by since nothing exciting comes up! I dont have that much patience to keep reading about irrelevant minor stuffs.Second is MC's personality. It's Childish! I mean if author wants to make it something funnier with this Childish MC then it's not working, Annoying even.Now for the good parts of the story!First is the uniqueness of the story! You can rarely see an NPC with Ice Magic! Or his dungeon is frozen themed! Always fire, undead, darkness, the usual edgy stuff! His main weapon isnt even a sword! Plus points with that! Second Grammar! There's no noticeable flaws in the writing! One of the many flaws that authors have and never even improve on it! But this! For a first novel you did well! Now! Although you have this good points, the flaws I listed will weigh more on why people stop reading, most people dont have that much of time to be patient.Goodluck!
Zero creativity. It isn't funny. It isn't thrilling. It's just meh. Typical ripoff of ripoff of ripoff of terrible idea. 5 star people are bots or paid reviews. Anyway this is trash.
This story could have been little interesting if the character design , world background was better . There are many inconsistency in the plot one moment he is talking then suddenly next chapter he is doing something entirely different . story is not connected at all its like every chapter is not connected there are many time where chapter and plot is repeating . It is very tiring to read this . I sincerely hope that that the can be edited again and little changes are made so that it can become readable. I still have this in my library hope see the Improvement .
So far, this is a very interesting read. I like that the MC has random spurts of emotions and then goes back to being emotionless. Overall good read.
Why does Webnovel bring back novels that are trash, do you think second time is a charm in this scenario? The other NEW novels were put on hold for a week due to this novel
Love it and cant wait for the story to progress more. Love how its going already. Cant wait for more chapters to come out. +1 new devoted fan
Waaaaah ooh my oh my, can't wait. This story is really so engaging and I'm beginning to fall in love with each character. The writer is doing such a good job, I love you loads
I like the statement 'I am naked' Also like the fact that there are demon beasts, I don't usually read these types of novels but I do like this one a bit, if your into that stuff then sure go ahead and read it, I don't read books past the first few chapters anymore.
Woah! I just came here for a review swap, didn't think I'd be interested!
Firstly, as an author, I like your writing style alot! It's more detailed than I can ever be.
Just a tiny flaw, your sentences are slightly off, structure wise, but it's getting better!
Also, this is my favorite genre, so I'm adding this to my library! Thanks!
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Nice introduction, the setting is classic but well receive. Still waiting for new chapters to really rate it, base on the other book from same author then this one should be interesting.
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