NovellaFan

Reading what you’re writing would be a good way to improve.Nothing is explained or shown, only told. Almost everything is reliant on prior knowledge.Try working on the “don’t tell, show” rule.

This is a really good book! You should continue to writing this in your free time. The MC only acts logically which greatly satisfies me. He may be quite emotionless when it comes to others but he still has a good side to those he treasures [Little One]

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