you need to do more research, golden core isn't powerful at all. this like first couple of chapters I'd full of you pushing to us that "ohhh ancient sect./ golden core powerhouse" no. golden core middle of the beginning levels its like a small boss that shouldn't fill a couple of pages worth just to push on to the readers "he's strong" lol. but good try.
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— The Pumpkinmancer’s Epic —
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Once upon a time in an MMO
A world as beautiful as peaceful
People lived, not the least careful
But, it all changed with his arrival
A devil? Harbinger of evil’s revival?
No, far worse! The legendary Jack’O!
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He came and went as he pleased
He was one that none could control
A revenant that one had to appease
None could even fathom his goals!
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Always coming out of nowhere
He rendered so many heroes crazy
He was considered a true nightmare
He was simply way too OP!
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Many searched for a single flaw
Trying to slay the immortal creature
A quest that was destined for failure
We watched this in complete awe
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We reveled in the tales of his deeds
For such power, we felt endless greed
We aspired to become as carefree
This is how the Legion came to be
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The ones who observed from afar
As he caused unbelievable mayhem
Brandishing his malevolent grimoire
All his enemies, he would overwhelm
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He made the entire world tremble
How could one cause such destruction?
But then we reached a frightening conclusion
Why did it sometimes seem accidental?!
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— Pumpkinmancer, Unknown Bard—
I think the story is amazing and very interesting. I would recommend to others, but this is just my opinion. Also have a great day everyone.
Very noice
It's actually pretty good :D
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Translation is so bad that it is not interesting to read.
Translation is so bad that it is not interesting to read.
Well, the story is also ~~
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the story is as bad as the title. a lot of cliched script and interaction.
dumb development. and more.
editing is good to be fair.
just think Pokemon with all of Ash's dumb moments and multiply that by 10. you might be a little less annoyed than I am and maybe as disappointed
author, well you drop this novel or you going to drop at some point or complete?
it's for me and for the current readers plus future readers, So that we follow through your journey .... or so don't waste time , and get disappointed.
(you know the reasons)
The story starts off quite normally but turns quickly into a magical adventure filled with amazing fantasy and plot twists. I am genuinely curious as to how the main character will interact in his world. Looking forward to more chapters in the future.