Up to chapter 35 review.
So first I'm going to give honest props to a self-published work that's pretty decently written especially considering that English may not be this person's primary language.
I'll also say that although it seems pretty quick I generally lean towards faster powerups and faster fights. The MC definitely taking the starting strong route and keeps it blazing - and no antagonist really gives him a fight of any consequence so far.
Now to the parts I don't like. While I guess I'm ok with the s*xy but not quite ultimate beauty being his first, it really felt like it went super fast. As in underage fast. More problematic is that there were then developments to show this will probably end up as a harem novel as of course his immature eyes start wandering.
But then we get to Chapter 35. I don't know why this is a thing in some CN novels but it is very disturbing when now this happens at an underage level. So I'll just say it - r*ape is wrong and even more so against children. You and all the sick f*cks who love this kind of violent behavior can go to hell. I hope you find mental help before you end up in jail living out all your decadent fantasies. As for me, I'm done with this story.
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It feels really forced and makes no sense. the grammer is ok at best. The way the mc and the other characters act is so robotic i dont recommend.
Nice... Am glad to see woman taking the lead. Just the prologue itself, reminds me of the mask of Zorro....this is definitely an interesting read... Fantastic plot... Go Women
Trash mC.. Tf is this? Dont waste ur time in this...
Well, let me make a brief comment on what I think of this novel.
The beginning is quite average, the MC is quite annoying, the dialogues between characters seem a bit strange and the presented world is typical for this kind of story.
However, over time and in subsequent chapters, many of these elements are clearly improving. We have some development of the MC, the relations between him and one of the main female characters are presented in a good way and they develop all the time. As these are the most important elements in the novel for me, I am glad that the author pays attention to them. Additionally, a big plus from me for the MC for his taste in women.
The main accusation I can have about the history is the fact that MC is really too OP. I prefer when the power of the main character is more balanced and side characters are able to compete with him.
Generally I may be wrong but it seems to me that this is the beginning of the author's adventure with writing and you can see it. Nevertheless, I highly recommend following the story because I think it can only get better with time.
The story has a very keen eye to details which appreciated. I read this story with ease as there was no detectable grammatical errors or anything. It's very sensual and hot! The writer cleverly uses words to describe things/tools without just stating it. You have to use your imagination, which is far better. You have to check this story out!
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This story was definitely interesting, but I feel like there needs to be some work on the pacing.
The chapters are a little too short imo and the overall story progression feels very slow.
I feel like before we were going into such a long arc we should have spent more time with the original setting.
A lot of the initial flare kinda got lost. I wanna go back to who I assume was the mc and continue his story.
Also (and this is very personal...) I'm not that into gambling so a lot of the future chapters kinda lost me.
THAT SAID!!! I do feel this is very well written and that the characters are well developed and charming to follow. I just wish the direction went somewhere different, or at the very least went somehwere faster.
owemji north i just read the first chapter and you are getting better at writing compared to the other book. not that it isn't good. this book flows much better. i will be looking forward to the reading the rest of the story.
A well-written story,
An interesting romance!
The story is of high quality; it flows wonderfully smooth. The grammar is on point. It describes the characters interestingly and the plot of the story is intriguing. So far it only has 7 chapters, and it definitely has got everything right.
Well done!
League of legend type of novel and I don't think it's a great read... Shocking that it's having 60chapter instead of 0 like always.. Anyway, good job and good luck.. Not my cup of tea..