I would have liked to say that this novel is too cliche, the story is repeated a 1000 times, etc for disliking this story.... but NO!
This novel is just plain bad.
First, thanks for this book.
Here is my review;
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The story and world background, power system and the system item has a very good concept. The idea behind it is great if you understand what the author is trying to portray. The same applies to the character.
But here are the challenges;
Though, there is a very good concept, the way they are executed are poorly done. The characters feels plain, the descriptions are the same. The emotions aren't shown or are almost nearly non-existent.
For example, Lucian or rather the main character of this story is supposed to be a veteran, an S rank adventurer but the way he is written as makes him look more of an amateur than a veteran. His thought process is almost like a kid, and even kids have emotions but we readers didnt feel any. For example
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Okay, the second review of the day.
This is my review after reading chapter 1, it wasn't because of the story not being interring enough, but rather I have no time.
So, the plot is a gem, but left unploshed sue to negligence and well, authors lack of consciousness.
I ain't sayinG Author isn't good enough or this book is trash. I personally liv d what I read in chapter 1. but as a reader, I should be cursing at the author. it gave me a hard time reading it. so, I was pissed but as a fellow writer I can understand.
I would say, to check your para comments, I did as much as I could and try to fix them. don't just change themz review them and think it for yourself. I haven't read the enite story yet.
The plot is good, but grammar isn't terrible, but a mess and made it harder to understand, making me reread paras simetimes thrice to comprehend the devine meaning hidden inside of them.
So, focus on
Style - I can let go of Grammar, but style should be good
Grammar
commas
I have read a good amount of dragon novels but I have to say that this is one of if not my most favorite dragon mc novel! I wish you luck as you make this novel and have it become popular while I will constantly read and keep up with it and give power stones as well!
5 stars for having a hot yandere cultivation sect master mom, as well as being in a world where only women can cultivate. Thats practicaly guaranteed no Annoying young masters
Nice book, reminded me of some very good Xinxia that i have read before and This book has sme parts with good action and i think it would have a great manhua.
I liked it up to a point. Some things about the novel I just skipped over and said, "ok". Like how even with two lifetimes he lets people walk over him. Or that losing his old family was so traumatic, but things going on with his new family make him just take a hit and then he keeps going down his path without being emotionally affected. The point I had to leave was soon after he got certain powers. He went to investigate people who were killed and ended up going and doing some nonsensical things. I can suspend disbelief for a good story but I feel things just went too far. I will be dropping the story.
Why reading this novel feels like i am having a deja vu. I think i read this novel 1 or 2 weeks ago. Well some people might like the concept of this novel. But i would love to see a proper world building before the author sends the reader to this new crazy world. Atleast have some proper reason and logic behind why the alien did what they did. Since when they started doing it and etc etc. Also why some many copy paste novel are coming?
at first i thought it will mostly be lemon chapters but the story is very good and harem member are also nice and they have there own personality.writing is also good and understandable.lemon scene is also good.hence this is a very good harem novel.i would recommend to give it a try
I like story so far, keep going ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
A great world background, characters are great writing on point over all a great novel.I am not really fond of systems but loved this one due to the emotion backstory.Keep up great work author