Really love how the fights were written. It's clear and well described.
It's not confusing. Great first chapter. Keep up the good work. I’m sure we’ll find out more about the world soon enough. Only complaint, the book cover and the story feels like it didn't match that well
I really like how to creat the character and the world in the book! WOrth the time to reading
The world building is very detailed. This novel is also a first that I have read which has three protagonists which makes it very unique as well. Although, the beginning doesn't have much dialogue- I feel that it isn't the determining factor on the quality of the writing and development of the plot.
I think that the novel has a lot of potential and wish the author the best of luck!
Nice, you write well without showing too many mistakes in grammar or punctuation. i like the way youre taking this on the characters. i too am not a fan of 1 dimensional villains or characters that simply have one quirk that defines their whole persona. The world could be described more intricately but i believe youve done a good job. keep writing ✍️
The beginning is a bit boring and banal, but over time (quite quickly) it gains depth and evolves like MC.
The characters are lively and interesting, the world: the more you learn about it, the more you want to know.
The whole novel is very pleasant, the only thing that bothers me a lot is Elisa, I'm not talking about the character but rather about her negative impact on the MC, in my opinion, and I think his titles would agree with me hah.
Overall your story is great; it’s written well, and the story is interesting. The only suggestion I have would be to have a chapter where all the sci-fi names/machinery are listed and explained (much like how FCS was explained in chapter 14 iirc). Or make guide us into familiarity by allowing us to grasp each new abbreviation before introducing another term.
I love sci-fi, but even this was a little hard for me too follow in the later chapters.
The scene with the old man and police officer was rather funny; I would’ve commented, but it kept loading!
Anyway, will be following this!
An undead ghost mommy "living" her new life to the fullest, protecting her friends and punishing the bad guys. I read almost a hundred chapters and I can't wait to see what her next move will be. XD
Funny, heartwarming and with action, one of the best stories I've read here.
anyone know a novel like this? like a very OP MC from the startplease give me a recommendation
ay brotha, im really liking what im seeing and i literally just spent 50$ just to unlock the rest of the chapters so theese thangs better keep coming.keep it up??
Hello, after reading about the first 100 of the chapters, i must say the book’s pretty good, especially for reading as a pastime. Although i must say the chapters at the outset are adorned with characters just conversing about childish subjects and cringeworthy remarks. I must say as the author has improved with his/her writing as the chapters have materialized. The only downside is that the author doesn’t describe the characters often whenever they appear. As a result, I just end up forgetting how most of the characters look like whenever I come back reading it after a while, due to the fact that my mind is also preoccupied with reading many other books other than this one. So i hope the author considers this little flaw. Ty!
Really interesting so far! I've read the first 5 chapters, and the author has been able to build a fascinating world in that short amount of time. The main character seems very cool as well. I also loved what the author did to define the alien language. Very creative! I think if the author updated more frequently, they'd have a hit for sure. Keep it up author!
it's an alrite story to read and shut of yur brain to not much is really happening in it the kid gets in danger and gets rescued somehowby her smartwatch her daddy got her that's it that's the whole premises of the story it's a mediocre try imho and slightly below average read the entire trial bit and daddy hasn't even shown his face yet :)