I will be reviewing 3 sections; quality of the text, characters, and the setting only, as those were the ones that did not receive full stars.
The quality of the writing is well thought out and written well, and I didn't encounter any grammatical mistakes. It reads well and fluidly.
The story so far a bit confusing, and I'm not exactly sure what it will lead up to, so maybe add foreshadowing here, and there in a few chapters -- would be nice.
For the final section, the setting needs to be more detailed and explained. The character's emotions and actions are explained pretty well, but the environment and setting description could use more polish. We have a general idea where the characters could be, but it's not explicitly clear to what place a character could be at during some important event, like the battles or the walking down the river, what are the surroundings? It would be a nice touch to add the full surroundings of where the characters are to build the world better.
Overall, it is a good read, I like the idea of the taming!
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Wonderful plot. Historical romance described in the Egyptian setup. NICE...
Brewing romance in the middle of misunderstanding, very interesting.
Overall Review: Very interesting story, the characters are well built and the plot isn't rushed. You can just imagine the story in your head as you read the words and images will unfold with the description... anyways that's what happens for me when I read a good book ;) just like a movie!
Suggestion: Few paragraphs are too long so you can break them into smaller ones for better readability.
Kudos. :)
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Over all this book has been a nice and humorous read
So... If you want to know my opinion then if you're looking for a funny story go no further!
So you can only read the prologue. And I think it's one of those prologues that aren't boring. You did a great job at that. It ended with a cliffhanger which will most likely attract reader. I wish you well on the competition.
SPOILERS AHEAD! My thoughts after finishing the whole novel (421 chapters + epilogue of about 10 chapters). The author was a newbie and this is his first novel (from raw notes, his other newer novels are: "I just want to be killed by everyone" and "I am really a perless expert"). Suprisingly a very charming novel in its own way. Definitely sets a different mood than all other novels from this genre. It was so interesting that I went for MTL. The fights and reactions get a lil repetitive in the last 100 chapters, but this novel is not about elaborate plot. Some might say there is no suspense as MC is invincible, but I actually liked how the story focused on fleshing out his personality and making the story a kind of sightseeing tour for MC. At first he was a wine lover and a foodie (his disciple inherited these traits), too lazy to bother with other forces, people etc, he preferred to be left alone, drinking wine and cooking some food, viewing nature and sleeping like a mortal (it's later explained that the first days after transmigration had a hand in shaping his personality). But then he started agreeing to do some tasks for his senior brother who was the leader of sect (the sect took him in when he just transmigrated and they took care of him) and so he started to take liking to going out, he became kind of curious child and found staying in his previous place for longer time boring. His sightseeing tour began, we could follow him and witness all these other areas, borders, voids, planets, domains, universes, higher realms, god continents and their struggles. He also acts as a kind of protector, casually setting e.g. protective barrier for his main world, isolating it from outside, so that it doesn't get invaded. They didn't have contact with other planes, voids, universes, higher realms anyway, because the world was low-tier. As for his hobbies, at the end of the main chapters, he developed a new hobby, which was singing. In epilogue, 100 years later, he still had this hobby, even his daughter thought he's just a drunk father who was married by her powerful mother because he looked handsome and his singing was nice to listen to. He doesn't go for harem. He ends up with one girl, and subtly rejects two others - everything somewhere in the last 15 chapters. The girl he ended up with was not surprising, I mean can it get any more obvious, she started to learn how to cook somewhere in the middle of the novel and later cooked food for him & visited him often, besides she appeared quite early on in the novel, but it was only MC seeing her on some sects meeting. Later he saved her life a couple of times, took her for a tour to the central continent, gave her beauty a compliment and so on. He actually didn't really have love feelings to other girls. His disciple is like his child, another one he views as little sister, and there's other one that is his sword. As for the last girl, he didn't meet her that often other than one arc so he didn't even notice she had feelings for him. As for the ending, well, it's actually not ridiculous as in most chinese novels. The ending isn't cut with vague lines, he doesn't end up ruling whole universe or waking up from a dream. Don't worry. The author even adds about 10 chapters of epilogue to show us what is going on 100 years later :) The author tied things up without rushing. Do I recommend reading it? Yeah, I guess. Not a masterpiece, but I liked this change of pace. "Xianxia: My Junior Sisters are all Villains
the worst kind of chinese trash I've ever read. 13 chapters in and NOTHING makes any sense. mc is a max level 80 character, but he can apparently be instantly killed in one hit by a level 5 boss. even though in every rpg ever made levels make a huge difference and his sheer stats as a level 80 should allow him to one punch the boss. furthermore hes playing vr like what we have in real life right now, not actual full diver virtual reality. yet hes able to do things and regularly talks about tastes and sounds and feelings you could only experience in a full dive virtual reality. author uses this as a way to introduce his female landlord who demands his 3 months overdue rent, and just comes into his room while hes playing the game and shes impressed and thinks he's like "an awakened lion" because of his perfect control of his character as he slowly whittles the boss to death with his ranged attack and staff that come out of nowhere.... this story has more plot-holes in the first 13 chapters then all of the top 10 stories on this site combined in their entirety.
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