"A delicious bit of irony," The tall one, Masato replied. "But I suppose we can let them get away, Captain. Our target is inside the dome."
From the characters to the plots Everything is intriguing Nice work Pls keep updating
am sure the MC is going to be a God eve more,he is growing powerful at just a starting point.
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A very good story i most say, it start fresh with description of event very easy to understand. The battle scene left more to be desired but Julius truly had a good head over his shoulder due to his strategic mind.I haven't read that far but if what was started with was continued we will have one of the best Kingdom building novels.Give it a try, you won't regret it.
We walked into the lunch court and there were a ton of people there were all kinds of people but I felt all of them staring at me I could feel there eyes on the back of my head just to get them to stop I turned around and winked I thought to myself I could get use to this I went and got lunch I got a whole bowl of chicken and rice me and my brothers sat down at a table and we ate until this idiot who looked a year older then me or two came up and put his arm around I was in shock and I heard my brother say "I would move or you might lose a limb" the guy laughing said "you want to try me whimp" I had enough I flipped him right the table and he slammed against the floor and started coughing I grinned and looked at everyone and said "dont touch me without my permission" everyone looked at me in shock i dropped my plate of food on him and told max and calub "it's time to go" everyone started to whisper behind us I didn't really care I didn't even get a close look at the guy all I knew was he was a big kid a pain in the ass if I say so myself he was part reptile was all I could catch max said "I'm surprised that is all you did I though he was gonna at least bleed" I replied "I don't want to scare them to much and we can count that as a practice round" the bell finally rang then I had P.E class next at least I didn't have to listen to a old person talk for two hours straight to my luck max and calub weren't in this class and guess who was the pretty boy from earlier this was going to be a great time
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First chapter was AASSSS, groveling to Luffy was js ?
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I'm one of those "silent or ghost readers" I don't comment or review much. I just wanted to tell the author that please improve your writing quality
CRITICAL REVIEW Read up to current latest release 71/71It's not bad. Very lightnovelish and anime-like written story. I don't really have much to comment about it surprisingly. There's some persona inspiration which is awesome. As for the romance, I can't tell if the mc is being oblivious or is dense. I assume the former. A complaint would be that while I did like it, the heroines seem easy to fall in love with the mc. Ngl it really seems to be resembling a tras*y isekai webnovel. Then again it can technically be excused since it is a dating sim world... but I value realism so it bugs me. As the story progesses the mc also appears to be falling into the shoes of becoming a true generic mc. Please try and avoid that. This is a frequent occurring issue in most 'mob stories', which defeats the purpose of the mob genre. It's hard, so just try and make it so he doesn't seem generic. Another issue I've had is that the novel does seem to kinda rush things somewhat. It kinda gives off the impression of skipping/wandering around with no truly meaningful substantial progress. An example would be when the story introduces Elicia. (Spoiler) Okay so then have an event together and then everything is just glossed over. They are friends I guess? We barely see any interactions which is different from someone like Luna who we see a lot of and see clear development of and most importantly... REASON TO CARE- that's how I express it. It's much like Isabel and Elizabeth where everything feels glossed and not substantial. They don't give me reason to care enough. And its not enough to tell, but you must show it. Luna feels "show" while others feel like "tell".Some spoilers~Grigory is awesome but his prestige falls the further you are in the novel. Perhaps its because of my expectations for him of being like a double-edged sword. The seemingly ominpotent power he brings in exchange for something precious later along the line. Because right now, he's basically a full-on slave for the mc. I had hopes of him being a very nightmare-like being for the mc that hes forced to use. But with the tone of the story and all, Grigory is just likable and comical.Much like my other reviews, I always end by trying to ship.As not all heroines are introduced (I think), I suppose I ship the MC with Elicia since I'm a fan of tragic heroines. Even tho we barely know her.I hope this doesn't end in a harem ending!
The first-person point of view adopted made the read relatable; I felt like an old man was telling me the story of his youth. I have read just a few chapters, but I am sure it is worth the read.