The plot very interesting but the translate is suck aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
It's a good story but the pace is TOO FAST!?Like, "Wait what? What happened again?" There's no time for readers to digest what's happening and the characters lack reaction (e.g. When the co-worker saw his new car or when the boss got pointed a gun and blackmailed)Also, you have a lot of mistakes with a & an, now & know as well as to & too... It would be great if you could separate the conversation into different paragraphs:I said, "...." My boss, "..." exclaimed. Something like that... I hope this helps your group... -from Originals Author Society
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5 star for the title. Too bad this is not getting attention. The heck a bicycle goes to cultivation world. DAMN! that is so COOL!!! Keep it u author-san. Lets see where this goes.
[Shameless Author]This story is my first novel, and I hope that people would find it enthralling and standardly enough. I'm a little worried about that, but I'll try to do my best.***We're all lost souls in our own little world, and I hope that through this story, you may find something, anything, that would help lead you to your desired path.
A brilliant piece of work, unique story with suspense and adventure, beautifully written. The story keeps you hooked and the characters keep you captivated. This deserves a lot more appreciation. I'm glad I found this gem.
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the author has the habit of reusing game/action scenes and just swapping the names of whoever is the mc's opponent
I think the story is good. I like the way author has written the character and scene details.Looking forward to more releases, keep up the good work
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Good story with little grammar errors. The world building is detailed and the story flows at a nice pace. I binged it and read it in a day but looking at the table of content tab, you can see it has 42 chapters in less then 2 months.