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Well I have to say the story development if fine, if not good, but your lacking in some parts (mostly grammar). Some of things you need to fix is grammar, world building, and character design in that order. I like the goblin stuff, but I’ve read stories like it (re:monster). The best part about this novel is the stability of updates, but after you finish the story that wouldn’t matter anymore, so I would have to rate it lower. But, overall it’s an alright read not bad but not good either just in between.P.S: Author if you are reading this please find an editor or a fan willing to correct the mistakes in the story

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Well time to get a review done on this book/novel/series. This book has a very simple ,but good premise. It starts with Allen playing a new game and meeting the seven sin sister as I like calling them. They become husband and wives in game. but outside the game they our total strangers. This starts slow as they build trust and know who they our. Allen past is very dark in my view. This give the MC why he nice but distanced at the same time. During this time the girls take a interest in Allen due to this. Now saying this as a quick summary of the start of the book. This book gives some good twist and turns. I mean that you don't see it coming sometimes shocking. this book also funny. there also good drama. the only con i see is not enough in real world time and see the character build from there. There is a lot in game but not in the real world yet. I do feel that the book is still building and needs more chapter/ word count. I do highly enjoy the book just needs more time to show the character building and development. This I feel is the only lacking thing is all. The fighting scene and the gore is spot on and the evil the writer is on point. This the review for now and will do another when there more chapter in the future thank you for this book and I really do enjoy the character. Team Zoe and Jane and Shea lol. review from Will and Barb

Writing quality is good, story development in this early stage is pretty good as well. Character design, updating stability and world background is satisfactory.......

Hey All. Author here. If you have any constructive Criticism  about the story so far. I would love to hear it. I still wish to improve a lot on writing .also any question feel free to sound off. I'll try to answer those as best as I can in this very earlier stage of the story thus far.Welp. back to writing I go!

I suggest you first read this novel before doing anything thing. What can you get in the novel MC which can show what true laziness is. Ahev more charisma then you and nice story which keep novel interesting with likeable characters MC, side with bonuses hateful characters with charcter development

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LOVE this novel! I got so into it that I didn't even realized I'd moved on to the next chapter already. I thought, "Wow this chapter is soooo long!" then I got to the next and thought "Huh?! Did I get here already?!" It gives me 49 Days vibes which is one of my favorite K-dramas so I'm absolutely loving it so far! I can't wait to read more!

Hi everyone, Author here.I am not comfortable giving reviews on my own work, it feels a lot like self adulation to me (Which I've always likened to narcissism.)Anyways let's go to the reason why you are here. The book. Er... no, the review for the book.The Primordial Record is not a fast paced book. But because it's a web novel, I tried to skim across overly long descriptions, to make a tighter story. I may have failed, you my dear readers would be the judge of that.Based on the settings of my book, which is Transmigration. The MC is swamped in a flood of deceit and lies. And because I made him overpowered, I had to balance that with really dangerous enemies, that understands the capabilities of the MC and make every confrontation a deadly affair. I abhor weak and stupid antagonist.From the start he would be placed in a unfavorable position and he would need every wit and cunning he possess to win.I would not be leaving obvious hints, I left many Setups and I trust my readers to figure them out as they proceed with the story, for I am a fan of puzzles, and if you stick around long enough, I hope you would be surprised by the Payoffs.The Primordial Record may not be an easy book to read, and I sincerely apologize for that. I left details of certain abilities and the world itself vague, as it is a huge world and I dont like info-dumps. There are many horrifying themes presented inside and spoilers warning. I am willing to kill off characters, if it would serve the story.I hope you enjoy this world. Because ultimately that is the reason I write. For your pleasure. Bricktrader.

Loving the story so far, its a little fast paced when there's nothing important and keeps the romance at a slower rhythm but still enjoyable.  The story keeps its self fresh (at least in the first 31 chapters) and lets the reader enjoy the story and its pace. Greatly recommend it. For the people that think its yuri, it isn't...

Honest reviews are here..[Spoiler Alert]The triple S talent in the title kinda means SSS-rank talent, not three S-rank talent.. This novel has an awesome synopsis.. I got so attracted and had a high hope for this novel when I read the synopsis, but after reading the story myself, I can only describe this novel with  one word, Dissapointment.. It not as amazing as you read in the synopsis..Basically, everyone on Earth has been teleported to another realm called Divine Sky Realm.. Luckily, the family members are not separated and are sent on the same island.. MC got teleport with his sister on the same island since they no longer have their parents..So, let put this novel in short..??Everyone have a system? Check✔️.??MC has SSS-rank talent called Infinite Duplicate? Check✔️.??Can duplicates any skills? Beep❌️.??Can duplicates any classes? Beep❌️.??Can duplicates any talent? Beep❌️.??Can ONLY duplicate items? Check✔️.??Can duplicates 1,000 items on 1st version once per hour? Check✔️.??Can duplicates 10,000 items on 2nd version once per hour? Check ✔️.??Join the event to defend their own island for 7 days from monster invasion? Check✔️??MC is within top 3 in the event? Beep❌️??MC is within top 10 in the event? Beep❌️??MC is within top 20 in the event? Beep❌️??MC is rank 26 in the competition? Check✔️??Even after getting thousands and thousands of items such as, more than 50,000+ treasure chests, weapons, armors, potions, buildings, defence or attack towers, and countless monster subordinate within 3 day after enter the Divine Sky realm, MC still loses in competition against other earth players? Check✔️.??The first rank is only has S-rank talent? Check✔️??Because of his duplicate talent, MC is becoming more like mercenaries king instead of strong MC? Check✔️??Overwhelming Powerful MC? Beep❌️??Overgeared MC? Check✔️??MC creating World Market Alliance to rule the market? Beep❌️??MC creating the World Market Alliance to help earthling growth? Check✔️??Ruthless and Merciless MC?? Beep❌️??Righteous MC? Check✔️.??Gullible MC? Check✔️??Easily trust others? Check✔️??All of the Alliance members is someone MC knows? Beep❌️?? MC didn't know anyone within the alliance at all? Check✔️??Announcing his island location in the chat openly?? Check✔️??Willingly letting anyone teleport into his island to live there without any security or guard? Check✔️??Basically, the enemy who hate MC or Alliance can teleport and destroy MC island by simply planting the bombs in various places after teleport? Check✔️??Hidden power? Beep❌️??Let his sister know all his secrets?? Check✔️There you go,the short summary of this novel.. In the world of superpower OR the world of cultivation, the ruthless and merciless MC is a must because the enemy is merciless too.. They will always try to kill MC without a reason and always plan revenge if not successful on the 1st try..Plus, I can't imagine how other earthlings defeat MC superb strong island and his cheat talent.. If you read MC items and his island defence, it was ridiculously strong for an island to grow to that extent with 3 days staying at Divine Sky Realm..But seeing MC got rank 26 in the events EVEN with his super cheat and OP talent, I know that the author will NEVER give the reader a satisfy win on MC..The author reason for MC being weak and not performing well in that events is that MC talent is a long-term superpower where it needs times to become OP.. A power that can duplicate 10,000 items is a power that can grow fastest and not a long-term superpower that needs times to grow.. Oh well, maybe some people love this type of story.. So, good luck..