More chapters, more chapters, more chapters please ?
Good start, albeit some little mistake here and there, it is totally normal for a new writer! The world building is really interesting and it has a lot of potential! Would totally recommend ?
Amazing descriptions, make me imagine that happening, look forward to more chapters! If anything, I think you could make the paragraphs a bit shorter
I really like your novel so far looking forward to future chapters!!! I was wondering though if there will be romance? I would love if you could reply. Thank you?
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First few chapters are ripped off from a game that is called The Walking Dead so yeah. If u like the story go play the game it was released in 2012 but it is a good story game.
I am so confuzzled what does music and Satan have to do with each other????. Maybe it is trying to say music is evil...?
you really drawn me into this story despite it still being in the baby phase. so please give me more.tsiyditditdiydkydkydkydkydkydutxutxjtd
Writing pace pis a little fast and main character get super OP real quick but I really like the direction the story is going. Even though I said the character gets super OP real quick I dont hate it. The only issue I have is how her family treats her after she wakes up from her coma I feel like that section should be slowed down a bit and expanded upon just a tad more.
Okay so I just finished chapter 3 and I am NOT okay. The author set this up so perfectly and then just—bam—drops Tong Hua hurtling down a slope she wasn't ready for. Let me walk through how this plot has been building. Chapter 1 is basically world-building with a side of "these girls are rich and I hate them for it" energy, but in a fun way. We get the dorm dynamics established, Tong Hua's obsession with snow introduced, and Su Qingyu casually booking a Swiss Alps chalet like it's a Uber ride. The plot moves fast here but it works because the tone is so light and fun. Chapter 2 introduces the male leads—He Sui and his crew—and suddenly we have two parallel storylines. One follows Tong Hua's adorable struggle on the beginner slope, the other follows He Sui's effortless dominance on the advanced slope. The author cross-cuts between them like a director building toward something. And then Nan Chao recognizes Tong Hua as the "key protected species" of their department. This is a nice touch—connecting the two worlds before they physically collide. Chapter 3 is where the plot really picks up speed. Tong Hua sees He Sui ski, gets inspired, forgets she's a beginner, and tries to follow. Jiang Mo warns her. It's too late. She's going down. The chapter ends mid-scream. "Ahhhhh"—that's it. That's the chapter. I had to immediately open chapter 4. The plot structure here is classic: setup, inciting incident, rising action, and then a cliffhanger that makes you question every decision the protagonist just made. Tong Hua's arc so far is from dreamer to someone about to face consequences. I'm curious whether the author is setting her up for a fall—literally and figuratively—or if this is just a comedic moment that leads to He Sui "saving" her. Either way, the plot is working.