Alas! Finally some excellent novel plus it's a MMORPG (which I like much other than kingdom-building novels)For meThe beginning of this novel was cliche with some elder stepsister and some things which are pretty commonBut the novel has things and the plot which hooks you up to expect the next chapter plus the story and has a good world backgroundOverall, it's good, and wish for the author to keep writing this novel
It’s amazing ?
Definitely a strange one, this is probably a book I'll remember reading months and years from now. It tackles the deeper topic about we age and progress in our lives in a really thought provoking manner. It admittedly does frontload a lot of information at the start which required me to reread it as to avoid being confused, but it was worth it. Thanks for both the entertaining and interesting read!
This book is amazing, keep going!Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
I have you 5 stars for the world background because when I was reading, I could easily picture the world in which our MC lives in. I also noticed that you paid attention to things like grammar and sentence structure so it was lovely to read each chapter. This novel has potential so I hope you'll keep working hard and doing your best.
So I finished all of your current chapters. So far, you've correctly estsblished the importance of the game, it's relation to the character, the character's goals and risks. Family interactions and everything seemed fine , so the initial premise set up is all well.Now the issues. Right now it's far too early to determine any plot issues that might stick out. I can't see any problems, aside from some areas with awkward wording, such as "the son of Ren's neighborhood" when introducing Roni. I'd recommend going back and perhaps polishing these areas, but those are fairly minor as it doesn't distract from the pace or the plot. There's also some minor grammar errors just as incorrect tense usage, "Ren never even met Silvia in his entire existence..." and so on. Next would be since you're writing in third person, you really need to describe the MC. early on for readers to build a easier connections. We don't really get an idea of Ren until chapter 5 during his character creation screen, and although it is good that you did so, I personally prefer it to be done early on, especially since you even have Roni, a character that readers are supposed to hate, defined before the MC. I found this to be rather awkward personally. Other than those I can't think of anything else at the moment. I hope your next chapter fleshes out Covenant well though. Be sure to make the world gripping and interesting to explore and follow.
Great read. Well spun, very captivating story. There is a lot to look forward to with this. Reading the lead change his ways for the better is inspiring. Great work. A very worthwhile read.
There are good aspects of this novel and then there are bad as well, though the bad will start to heavily tilt the balance of the scale after a few hundred chapters. The writing quality and/ or translation is the highlight of this novel, the author has taken the time to pack in information, as well as constant world building into the story in addition to the lengthy chapters. The author is also a little more creative with the cultivation system and while, it does not venture off too much from your typical system, the author is more in-depth with explanations as well as giving each minor realm its own unique, innovative touch. Each minor realm of the cultivation system has a reason to exist and slowly, but surely builds a logical foundation over time that ties into the power the cultivation system grants each character. There are also unique elements to the story that I find creative and fun, such as the various side characters that are parodies of your typical Xiaxia protagonist or the constant countdown towards the MC's doom that pushes his cultivation vs. the typical "I want power over my own fate" trope.
If I had to summarize the bad, it would have to be that the novel is directionless, slow pacing and in relation to that, too much filler. The author has, without a doubt, thought out their power system. After that though, is where the novel loses a lot of readers because it gives the feeling that the author had a great idea for the power system but didn't have much in terms of story and plotting, constructing a weak and mediocre story around a solid foundation. There is too much filler and you end up reading thick, convoluted chapters that does not push the needle forward much in the grand scheme of things, spending upward of 30 to 50 chapters to stretch stuff out. There is not much progress with the MC in terms of cultivation and while the beginning of the novel makes you believe that you know what kind of character he is, he will then later mellow out and become quite generic and quite frankly, cowardly. I would argue that this novel is more about the MC building up a faction + kingdom building in all honesty, which isn't something I was expecting this novel to turn into if you were to compare the beginning of the novel to now.
its quite great actually because I like inchest but I feel like this one is a copy becouse in another novel called Taboo system I guess is same as this but I feel this one is a rush and its hard to understand the plot.
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Hmm where should I start??
First of all for those who like legendary mechanic this novel has the same characteristics with different world background.
The start of story is rather confusing and not interesting enough for me. The story has a slow pace that you will find the chapter mostly talked about his daily story, well a lot of preparation thing before the player (Beta) start appearing at chapter around 20 I think.
To be honest the story itself was actually good and has a good potential (I don't read the raw, it's based on this trial read) but the one that will turned you off will be the translation. A lot of sentence in the novel don't made sense, it the way that it was missing a lot of information that affected the detail of the story.
Well I'll end it here, I'll edit it later after reading all 40 Chapter.
Very cool! A little like a hybrid of Bloodborne and SCP, so if you're into that, I'm sure you'll love this.
10/10 I've already done fanart and will probably do more