muy buen libro me llena de satisfacciones
I MTled this a while ago. Ah, well, it's literally the same thing repeated over and over and over and over and over and over and over. Did you get tired from reading that? Over and over and over and over and over and over again? Well, this book is literally just that but x10000.
You asked for honest feedback, so I have been quite candid in this review. This does not mean I did not enjoy your story, or finds it immensely lacking. I am simply trying to help you progress by giving you some pointers.Firstly, your dialogue comes across as wooden and unnatural. I believe it would help if didn’t put as much exposition in your dialogue.Secondly, there is an absence of rhythm in your writing. I miss a cadence when reading your story. It does not necessarily withhold me from immersing myself, but it would help pull in your reader.Lastly, and this one is more personal, but as a reader I wish for more texture. What are the surroundings like? How is the air? Does it smell? Is it clear? Is the sun blinding to the eyes? I want to feel like I am there with you characters. Give me the cracks in the pavement and the chipped paint of shop signs. Give me the feel of the wind and the smell of spices in the air. That’s what transforms a story from good, to great. And that’s what pulls in your reader.Overall, I believe this story has a lot of potential. It has a clear storyline with good characters, and writing. Well done!
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One of the best novels in this site,the world and character building,romance,comedy and action are great,in the start is a bit slow but later it only gets better and you can't stop yourself from want to read more and more.
this is an amazing novel..I love how it just flows ...excellent ??????????????????????????????????????
I dont care if you hate qidian or anything, but please dont mess up with the novel rating.. This actually a really good novel and your hate for qidian is nothing to do with this novel.
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This is has interesting story which many readers likeIt is funny in some way you use bad words for the character to express his/her action.keep up the good work m8 ^^
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THANK U FOR PUTTING IT UP TO VOTE!! I HOPE THAT IT GETS ENOUGH!! I REALLY LOVE THIS BOOK!! I REALLY HOPE U CONTINUE IT!! AND IF IT DOESNT GET VOTES CAN U START IT OVER AND JUST WRITE AND DONT STOP OR HAVE IT GO TO VOTING PLEASE!! I REALLY WANT TO SEE THIS BOOK KEPP GOING!!
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