Writing Quality: A decent amount of grammar errors but understandable. Story is good enough to overlook
Stability: Seems fine
Story: Very interesting so far and unique
Design: Kid is cute and hopefully spelling mc donalds on the first chapter wrong was how the kid pronounced it because it was funny and cute
Background: not sure yet
Interesting story the plot is very good, the protagonist's personality is amazing, harem I don't know if there will be a heroine or will appear later on I hope so
I am sorry author but after the addition of the Qi shan, the story became irritating to read and after investing so much time and keys into the chapter, I am meeting with this disappointment. I even waited that maybe the character is only irritating at the start but oh man even after 10 chapter, she and mc is as irritating as ever. And because of Qi shan, Mc's interactions with other characters like house spirit or his teacher is also getting irritating and cringy, sorry but I don't it was a nice idea to add Qi shan here.
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exp exp exp l have to level up want that good exp!!
i would definitely recommend, but that is just because i really enjoy gaming novels, but the story is nice, mc doesn’t feel op or something and there is already some character development. if you’re not sure if you want to read it just read a couple of chapter and decide if it’s worth it after :)
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The first few chapters are kinda random, I'm not gonna lie. But I really enjoyed the character development to and the big fight in the beginning, even though it wasn't explained how it happened? Or at least I wasn't paying attention?
But I'd really hope to see more of the adventure part to this novel and who am I kidding, I'd love to see more incubism and ecchi in this too.
So keep up the good work!
A good novel.
However, there's various points needed to be mentioned.
1- Early wall pay chapters, with only 31 chapters being able to decide whether you like the story or not. This isn't a problem itself If it weren't for the short chapters. The chapter are too short for what the novels need.
2- This point is related with the previous one, due to short chaps, there isn't a feeling of development with every chapter, you need to start lengthen the chaps or at least rethink about how you will build each chapter, please don't fall under the premise of spamming chapters for small events that could be easily be fixed with a length of 1.800k to 2k words length.
3- The early chaps really need to be extended to at least 3k words to explain your new readers where they are and let everything set go for the walled chaps, where you could put the story on.
Nonetheless, the novel have an interesting premise, a good world building and background and the MC is interesting. What I liked more about this novel is the ground to improvement with the MC personality, as having a new chance to experiment things he couldn't in his previous life could lead to interesting plots.
The females characters are well portrayed as the side characters personalities too.
Dropped at chapter 211 (TLDR: A cool waste of time until around chapter 100)
I'm done. I put up with the "can" when author meant to write "can't." I put up with how one of the major 5 characters names suddenly changed at chapter 100. I put up with how the MCs mental buddy's name switched back and forth from Blood to the same as a different character's name.
I didn't care how every friend he made was royalty or somehow a sleeping dragon he's known for years but didn't remember. What I do care about is how every fight could be half a chapter but instead is spoon fed to us over 15 where ever bad guy needs to say the same cliches non-stop.
there are around 5 consecutive chapters that haven't been updated from a preview which breaks the story up, recently there has been released chapters that only have half of the chapter the remain half is from previous chapters. The story is interesting and has a good balance to progress and world building, unfortunately the previous mentioned problems have let this novel down.
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