The Heart Of Dominance (OLD)

The start is dynamic and attractive, while usually, the norm is to write in the past tense author had chosen to use present but it's not a bad thing per se.

Character design is unique and genuine in my opinion.
there is no information dumping and the story flows appropriately which is good.

Updates are stable enough that readers don't have to wait.

the only flaw I found in the narration is that it is tough to read conversations because there is no gap between them and it leads to confusion about who is saying what and which part is said and which part is not.

I think it can be corrected easily so it's not a big issue.
good luck for the author.

Very good story! Is very intriguing and has a very good start. I don't particularly like that it's written in present tense for the most part, but I got used to it. It does have a few Grammer errors though.

Good story don't know what else to say I rarely do reviews gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg

Writing Quality: A decent amount of grammar errors but understandable. Story is good enough to overlook

Stability: Seems fine

Story: Very interesting so far and unique

Design: Kid is cute and hopefully spelling mc donalds on the first chapter wrong was how the kid pronounced it because it was funny and cute

Background: not sure yet

The author expressed concern about novels that don't explain their magical systems very well, and I am fully in agreement. However, this guy isn't just talk. He actually followed through with his criticisms and explain how magic actually worked properly! Therefore, I think that this deserves a read, if only for the properly explained magic system!

I liked this one. It is a work that successfully blended fantasy and drama. Poor Inut, he deserves more than this in my opinion but it is the author's choice, respect :)