The story is great! It has a lot of potential into it! I think this is going to be awesome in the future! So far, after reading the first few chatpers, I believe this novel is amazign! I commented the things that I think needs editting!I'd like to note that the events felt a bit sudden. It would be fantastic if you could establish the narration first before placing the system. Let' say that the man was weak, like you've said, author. And in that world/village, violence was always the key. Survival of the fittest. Therefore, he needs to do something. It would be better to explain first the situation he was into. Let the thug beat him up. Show the main protagonist he was not meant to wield a gun, but in the end, he was the "top gunner" in the story. In that way, you can make the story more interesting! feel free to disagree, and these are only my suggestions~ Kudos for the author!
Absolutamente apaixonada pela história e personagens! Incrível! Obrigada por disponibilizar a história completa, já que a série produzida não conta nem a metade de toda história! Obrigada!
I'll likely end up being quite shameless. Despite a slight improvement, I should nevertheless point out that my writing is far from faultless. I've been working to make the book better, especially this one while keeping the book's "multiverse" theme going. While maintaining some of the details and characters from the original GINKEN, this is thought of as a separate work.
The way the original plot developed wasn't to my liking, and the books I was making in the background were taking up unnecessary room in the library. To fix that, I've made a new account, which is the one you're currently viewing.
Anyway, I look forward to reading all of your comments and I hope this book finds a home.
Many thanks to all who support it!
I read till chapter 20. I love stories like this. :)
1. I got a dig bick2. You that read wrong3. You read that wrong too4. You checked5. You smiled(Disclaimer if you don't like this review; It will be removed in the future, probably, if you guys give this novel enough nice reviews. Don't rage and be happy!) .
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i see no flaw in this book. There are emotions. There is a story. The only thing I'm not sur about is the development potential of the main character. I mean, he's already wise and steady, what evolution could there possibly be ? And without MC's personality's evolution, the story would be empty.
Hey guys. Author speaking. I am extremely sorry for not giving updates for the past few months. I've just been very busy. But I should be back again in a few more weeks. Thank you. Please don't forget to leave your comments so that I may know your thoughts on the book and I may be able to improve it. Once again, Thank you.
Another of DMC's hit books! I feel like my heart and soul is stolen! Story Quality ✓ Characters ✓ World Building ✓ OP MC ✓ Updating Stability ✓ Story Development ✓ (Hmm, I think this one's as good as TGOPC... Maybe even better. Heh heh)
The novel goes well at first. Later on MC is nonsense, his brain does not work, his behavior becomes an anime hero, he becomes a hypocrite, he plays the good person. My goals are as follows, he says what they do is different nonsense. I have never seen a smart, sensible MC who has such a trick. None of them use the potentials of the cheat. In the hands of someone like aizen or orachimaru we can see a really sensible trick.
This book is definitely one of the best trial reads so far. The concept is really interesting and enjoyable to read. It makes you want to read more. Also Cthulu so that's 6/5 already.
Why don’t you release more chapters author MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE