Okay, here’s my honest review. I’ll start with the title. “Miracles on Mysterious Mars”, sounds kinda interesting. It means that the setting will be in outer space. Next, the synopsis, I like that it’s short, concise, and direct to the point. It also mentioned that it’s in the year 2080, so I expect some futuristic gadgets and other sciency stuff. Lastly, the prologue, or was that chapter 1? I was confused. Also, though the grammar is passable, there were a lot of punctuation misplacements. Also, a piece of advice, instead of using (!!!) and (???) for unnamed characters, it’s better to use (Person A) and (Person B). Anyway, keep it up and keep improving, author!!
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the lack of editing in this novel is disappointing.was such a niche genre. had all the potentials to be a gem but been riddled with the mass of people who likes to give opinions about mc all around him. a mashup of, young master cliches Mommy lying trough (whatever it means) the monsters are actually the most interesting part of this novel and make it unique among others. if it just cuts up the excess waste of fillers of every non-named NPC talks, it would have been a much better novel.I'll skim around for a few more to find that interesting part alone.
The start of the story is great, but from about chapter 180, there are dozens of chapters with repeating contents, missing huge chunks, and having numerous chapters out of order. With such a large section of chapters being basically unreadable, there is no point to read this novel for free, let alone needing to pay for it.
I'm impressed! The author's imagination is wild! I really want to read this novel now! Every chapter has hooked me! Please, author, continue writing!!!
Good author... if your novel only had as a reason as a hobby of yours, then without a doubt I would be encouraging you with this peculiar system that you present, after all you don't see many novels with that kind of premise.However, author..., when I saw you compete in the WSA 2022, then it is really questionable what theme you chose for your system, and not because it is a sin to write Simp stuff. If not to the type of audience that is going to be addressed, without further exaggeration, and many readers will not give your novel a chance, just because it has the title Simp.Then, in chapters 1 and 8, it is more than enough for several readers to abandon the novel, and even I felt uncomfortable in chapter 8. The reason was the interaction of Jack and Mary, their thoughts and actions do not match, not they are grounded and feel compelled for a later plot to follow. Then if I have to guess later Mary will regret it and then Jack will slap him with a reality that no longer needs her ("Sigh, that theme is already more than reused by several authors"), and with that I'm not saying that I forgive her; however, the previously established relationship is a headache for many readers.Now the question of characters we have a protagonist without self-esteem, with an inflated ego, Mary the typical naive heroine who later becomes the intriguing villain, Lucy the opportunistic girl, and in itself a large majority of readers will repudiate that type of background for your characters.Well author with that being said, unfortunately your premise is already doomed, as long as you can win, I just know that it will take extraordinary effort to make the Simp system enjoyable to read.Honestly, I wanted to rate this story 3 stars, but then I remembered that it's too early to give a review; however, I felt the need to write this, so in the form of support I decided to leave it 3.6, now I recommend reading it, well if you are a tolerant and calm person you may give it a try, but if you lack those two, then no, because you will take a bitter experience in these early chapters.As soon as all this is said, it's my personal opinion and if I'm wrong, just let me know in the answers section, I don't mean to offend anyone and all that, and good luck author with the competition.
I was recommended this story by a friend and it is amazing to see something fresh on web novel. You are doing a great job author even though it seems to be your first novel keep up the good work all the best!!
I've only read chapter one so far and I'm pretty excited for the rest. The concept is a very good one and I want to see how this will unfold. There aren't many if any, female mc, better yet a female fox girl mc (personally I prefer a fox mommy cough cough) in an apocalyptic setting, so this is a kind of rare find.That's all I have to say so far. Keep up the good work, Shoomshoom. <3
Now quick heads up not until about chapter 50 or 51 does the main character get into the hole necromancy thing but the story build up is worth it and I'm really enjoying what the authors done so far and there is some mess ups with the he/her while the characters are speaker but other than that pretty good novel.
Une histoire interessante d'une transmigration au premier abord cliché...Dans le but de démonter ces clichés !(veuillez ignorer les accusations de racisme, elles sont basées sur une seule phrase mal tournée par l'auteur ayant depuis été réécrite...)Le protagoniste doit gérer le caractère et la personnalité méprisables du précédent propriétaire du corps, ainsi que sa relation avec une vraie famille complète avec ses qualités et ses défaults au lieu d'être orphelin avec éventuellement un petit(e) frère/soeur comme dans 90% des novels du genre...Le résultat est à la fois comique et sérieux dans le démontage du genre, sans pour autant oublier d'avancer dans l'histoire doucement et régulièrement.Aucun risque de s'ennuyer, une perle à lire absolument !
Nice plot you have. It's very intriguing and mysterious, I love it! But it would be better if you used some coma ( , ) in your dialogues. That's all I could say basing from my level of experience and level of criticism.
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