Chapter 221 translator has noted the he doesnt understand why the MC has no sk points. If the translator reads this. Sk is skill points. Not unassigned stat points. They are different
The first five chapters are great. This is my first time using this platform so I hope for the best.
It has an amazing story so far. A little bit skeptical about the Gacha part but It's integrates well. I wish the author upload more chapters though. Author keep it up.
In the beginning it was church now it jump to exploring the universe which then leads to a crowd of side characters gathered together, the MC isn't really introduced all that much, the only thing we know is his nameA beauty introduced into first chapter but its not a "jade" beauty along with a lot of inspiration from other worksit can engage a reader who isn't all that curious and want to waste time. Even the outlines of bolding words, exclamation points (!) actually feel like we're inside the author creation.Although the mona building isn't really describe how big it is until a few chapters later.I would say as someone who spent the first few chapters reading it can really engage you to a world of likable fantasy.Some scenes like magician ones could using clapping to draw attention of the background character in front of them or those around them when they're yelling/scolding others for mistakesHowever in chapter two there is 2 random bolded texts that were suppose to be inaudible, what is this about?In chapter 3, romance is in the works. This kind of engages more plotline depends on how you view/build itI like how you introduced assassins who hide with cloaks on.I get your trying to switch povs a lot, I think labeling that pov from side pov to MC pov may be a good idea to not confuse readersOther than the first few chapters in, you are doing well so for on your novel.
The story is really interesting and beautiful! I see that the Author(s) have mixed various tropes. I hope that this one is really going to be interesting.
Story starts off a little dark so if you aren't quite the type to enjoy that type of stuff I recommend you brace yourself before reading. The grammar is good, but my one major criticism to the author is to space out the paragraphs. No one likes to read giant lumps of text over and over again.
This is actually really good for your first novel and compared to your fan fiction. The world background could use some work cause you only have one kingdom the Phoenix kingdom but I like how all other nations' leaders are related. the writing quality can be improved there are some mistakes or missing words
amazing to have another novel from you. I love how the writer has mixed the world of science with magic. you do not get to see this often, do you? moreover, it has a totally different but fascinating world building. and the characters are well developed toobest of luck, author
Author-san here, shamelessly giving my review!❤❤ This time, my system might have taken a turn for the worst?? But oh well, wouldn't its host be able to handle it?Hope you all love it! Enjoy!??
The first couple of chapters are horrendously translated. It gets better later on but it’s still not great. Also the story isn’t consistent. One chapter he upgrades an artifact from 1 minute of usage to 100 minutes. A few chapters later it’s back to 1 minute. In another chapter it states a beast is a mid gold tier. In the next paragraph it says early gold tier.Also, at this point im confused on a lot of things. Is the only thing that has matters is how high of a quality a pet is? How do pets get stronger? Can a lower quality pet with a higher grade defeat a higher quality one? Not much is really explained for most things; it’s very vague. Overall it’s fine if you just skim through it without thinking too much. As long as you ignore the plot holes and sub-par translation you could read this as a way to pass time.
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