This is my first time writing story through my grammar and update are not stable but to the reader I expect to take some time and write a review, so that I can know you opinionSo take some time and write a reviewThanks you for reading and supporting.
this is an amazing book read you won't regret it the mc is someone who would do anything for the people he cares about and while he may make mistakes he trys to learn from it all
Another Review from the Author. This time this is not as shameless as the first one since I will address complaints the readers pointed out. I know everyone wouldn't be pleased by this work of mine, however before going in, please read this first.This novel is written in First Person Perspective and with only one perspective which is the MC's.So everything you will be reading here were all taken from the MC's own eyes. His thoughts, what he experienced, everything. He's the source.I also took it upon myself to write while keeping in mind not to self-project myself in the novel. His thinking will all stem from the 16-year old mind who because of a sudden increase in clarity or intelligence or anything you could call it, tends to overthink most of the time. And well, there's also his adaptability so he won't react as you expected on something where one should start asking questions or be surprised instead he will fall into his overthinking habit.This is where the first complaint will be addressed.'I am weak.' You will be seeing him thinking like this at the earlier parts of the story. He's an overthinker and whenever something happened that's out of his grasp, he will immediately lean on that thought.Of course along the way he will outgrew that thought but yeah, some dropped this before that happened. He started from the bottom and I wanted to show what's going on inside his mind so his mindset at the earlier chapters will stay like that.For the second and third complaints, the Harem and the Side-characters . This is clearly tagged as a harem novel so expect the harem members will be introduced.'They were introduced but there's no substance in them. What are they thinking? Why did they do that? Why did they fall for him? etc.'As this is a FPP novel, of course, you wouldn't be privy to what the other characters in the novel are thinking most of the time. That's unless they pointed it out or explained it themselves. Though they're introduced, the times they interact with the MC were all situational and most of the time their real thoughts were still not showing on the surface. They're all moving and thinking by themselves in the background even without the MC looking at them, so the next time they will show up in his perspective, bits of pieces of what they're thinking and their personality will be exposed.I used this kind of writing on my first novel as well, slowly unraveling the personalities of the characters introduced. But since some of the characters will be left behind on their worlds and it's still unsure when they will show up again, they will feel flat.I understand that point but that's just how it is. Characters will not immediately open up to him but as their interaction with each other increased, you'll see the sides of them that's not shown during the first time they were introduced.'Not detailed enough. The description is too bland.'As this is something even I am not confident at. You will feel that his environment were not described properly. I suck at describing things and people but I'm trying to improve it through continuous writing and reading.I think this is everything. For the typo and grammatical errors, I can only ask you readers to point it out for me to fix. I only use Grammarly and Docs to correct the mistakes and surely they're not perfect.If I still missed a point that you feel like its a blunder of the novel, feel free to comment it below and I will answer them to the best of my understanding of my own work.Thanks for reading. :)
Oh well, what can I say, I like my novel a lot and I recommend it to everyone :DBook 2 (chapter 45 onwards) is probably much better than the first. Cherry and I really worked hard on it and tried to fix the inconsistencies in book 1. I really hope we will be able to deliver the paperbook in the next weeks. It will be available on amazon.com We have a lot of italian readers but I really look forward to see how our novel will fare in the international stage. Have a good read!
other than the update stability and few minor grammatical errors, everything is fine. give it a try
nice to see you novo that is not fanfic really appreciate the effort and look forward to more chapters to the other hope you do well and continue writing i've added you to my reading list fighting !
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I don't understand how the MC who had to fight his step siblings and schemes against each other who choose to have a harem and let his own children have to experience the same thing.I just don't understand the chinese author logic.Chinese author also like to use family in-fighting as a way to get enemy for the MC but that feel stupid when we think about it.Having the family fighting each other only make them hate each other more, and especially when the elder fan the flame even more, and it only result in either outsider take over or the family have to cut off it own members, sometime the member even betray their family as well which feel stupid.For some reason, the family are expected to be united against outsider, while instead of cultivating feeling for the family, they oppress their family member, and expect them to still fight for the family. it feel stupid.
this story is so amazing. im so glad we have people like mob_mobbers to write these masterpieces. i read this book every single day and its help me out so much i love you mob_mobbers please create more stories like this
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The person who posted this clearly used MTL(Machine Translation) and it shows. It is barely readable.
Woaahh this is interesting, mc cruel, smart and only cares about himself hahahaha, although it's a bit disgusting he eats human flesh, but it's a bit funny too haha, the spirit of the writer, don't drop this novel !!!