I like the world building so far, and I think that It promise. I like the inclusion of different pov's; as we can see what the side characters think of the main character.Wish you luck on this story
IT was kinda good until chapter 60 and up the mc actually acts like 10 year old he has no goal or any type of intellect or experience of a 30 year old when he attends the dukes party its so much going on in the background i dont even know whats happening theirs like 5 different groups with different goals and agendas the mc is just getting pushed around with nothing on his mind but woman that's the only thing he does to get back at them not oh so you forced me into a dinner im gonna get your wife someday oh you punched me well im gonna take your wife we find out he has a lot of talent and magic but he hasn't trained since then he only did it for a mission once and that's it it's so much happening and his face and its like he's ignoring it i see where the plot can go and it has potential but the mc is just too stupid and immature
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I really love the original story but what you did here was too off with all the exaggeration in the number of slaves and also why does the Mc have to be so disturbed.Well I at least expect it improves.
I really like this book! Everything that is intriguing about Chinese fantasy with a truly western perspective. Honestly a breath of fresh air for me. Maxcool, I really hope that it stays so compelling and away from the cliches that are so beloved. I'm really pulling for this novel!
Very detailed. Good characters. In excited to see where this book is going to go. I can already tell that the author has plans for the plot.
This is sad....Sad that such a good story has yet to be recognized, honestly this is well written the character development is well, its emotional with drama. The character development is well balanced..slow and yet not too slow. Plus, the [possible ] love interest is not some slutty or unrealistic character [love at first sight...****]. ALso The MC is quiet interesting.Suggestion: -There is too much secrets..kinda annoying..[ex: the secret family of the MC, the characters past] try to reveal them.-I personally ship MC and fait together..make it sweet and fluff, add some romance..[just dont make fait some korean style female lead that was used by her previous lover and then abandoned..in fact no previous lovers at all...! I'm begging no korean style tragic angst ****..keep this happy]. The beautiful maiden...Lady fate came and saved her beloved mortal..-Get it?-Bash..yep I want some bash..bash MC's past fiance/family...[I mean they werent there when he was broken] and no redemption..just straight up bash and they regret it.-Dont make Nev and her brothers past angsty..just sad.-This might sound weird but in the later chps make MC start a family with love interest..maybe 3 kids.. Anyway I said my piece...love your stuff,,i do hope more people read this...also dont make this angsty/tragic/korean style [NO offense to koreans but most of their romance is rape/betrayal/separation...cheating and then back together..total ****]..try to keep this happy and fluff and romantic..we all need some romance in our lives.Good luck and Good show.
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king of course you can do it for a few days and I felt powerful enough that it would have to do that in a det to get a job in the world and that would have to do
should be a 4 star but the unfinished characters made me drop a great read.. after a month of not fixing it I consider it on purpose so *<[( EPIC FAILURE )]>*..... bye bye