Out of all of this authors works this is definitely the best and my favorite in my opinion. I don't really like the other works of this author. In the godless one i didn't feel like the MC personality reflected his own life experiences well, so i only read first few chapters. Against the heavens i just don't really like that MC either. I would also rather read about someone trying to gain power for revenge instead of love like this novel.
I have only read one chapter so far so I will be sure to update this review in the future
The grammar spelling mistakes incorrect words etc break the flow of the story as I have to stop myself sometimes and try and figure out what is actually being said
I also feel that the first chapter moves very quickly with very little world building or any build up whatsoever which I feel is necessary since unlike quick wear world hopping novels this is different
I appreciate that the authors first language isn’t English however the use of an editor or someone to look it over and make sure that the errors are caught and remedied would make this story much better
read thinking it was the recipe of super powerful girls only missing element x
Selfish Protagonist,
Non-Human Protagonist,
Antihero Protagonist,
Bloodlines,
Cautious Protagonist,
Evil Protagonist,
Evolution,
Fantasy World,
Gods,
Gore,
Hidden Abilities,
Human Experimentation,
Male Protagonist,
Monsters,
Scheming Secretive Protagonist,
Strength-based Social Hierarchy,
Transmigration,
Weak to Strong
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Ingles enferrujado
Honestly is so great, but I didn't expect what's MC think right now. Like u know always be so thinking strategically and manipulating. If that's the case, I hope that MC acts more and dsn't talk a lot with his enemies or friend which's will make people think he's authoritative indirectly. Sorry if I've bad english, thanks.
The author, unfortunately, has never typed a single ” . “ in their life. They focus a lot on the visual aspect of their story and none of those pesky things like characters or dialogue. The character that speaks the most is probably the system…
I am not caught up with the story so I don’t know if these things improve but it is kinda a slog here towards the beginning
Okay, I read some chapters but for some reason, I cannot establish a clue about what your story is really about.TLDR, here are my strengths and weaknesses for your novel.Strengths: Unique genre. Good representation of the premise.Weaknesses: No knowledge of plot structure. Lack of description of what the story is all about along with scenes.I know for a fact that this novel falls under the sports genre, so I was expecting fast-paced action scenes of the players or something similar. I didn’t see any of it in the first chapter.I suggest describing the scenes (for example, describe the office’s appearance) and adding context to your chapters. When making chapters, there needs to be an objective of what you are trying to portray to the audience. You need to convince people to read your book.I tried to understand some characters, like Jeff, for example being the boss, but for some reason I cannot flip the page because I keep reading scenes without any context of what it is all about.Also, please improve your book title, so I can have a clear picture of what your book stands for.I appreciate your desire to represent the world of sports in novels, but for now I just can’t read the rest of it because of it lacking a clear foundation of what it is about.But you shouldn’t give up. Sports isn’t my thing, but knowing you want to represent it through your novel is making me want to read more. That is, if you revamp/rewrite your book.Good luck on your writing journey by the way, and feel free to message me in the forums should you have any questions.
Hello, Reader I am giving myself a shameless 5-star review, because that seems to be a tradition here. Before reading this novel, there is a brutal scene with one of the female-lead characters at the beginning of the story. (Also, I am not a native English speaker, so please expect some errors. If you could tell me what mistakes I made, I will do my best to correct them)
i like the concept but from what i see the updates where a bit unstable. i think that this is the author first book becausae of the dialogue were a bit clunky
only read upto 4 chapters because of daily recommendation .too much unnecessary details . boring or my mood is just off. first 3 chapter were about surrounding object like corpse , luxurious doors , big expensive mirror etc. i couldn't focus because situation of MC doesn't seem tiny bit desperate or serious so why useless details .
I can't understand mc's personality, she changes too often, sometimes he's very daring (when it's causing him problems) other times he's too loose, when he was a little more daring , it might have saved him some trouble...another point that I don't understand, that's why the mc doesn't progress at all without his system, he spent a year at the academy without advancing only a little in his magic cultivation, nor in the level of these spells, he relies completely on his system, suddenly I don't understand what he does all the time in which the other students progress, are their talents so weak? it has no compatibility with black magic? the author does not explain anything, he is just blocking it as long as he does not use his system, which is frustrating
Love this, but I'm dreading that I will catch up too soon. Wish there were more chapter and faster release schedule.
all your book are very good but if you don't mind can you pls continue writing dual cultivation
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