Now while I generally despise the netorare genre entirely, in this instance I cab sort of accept it since it was a catalyst for his "power" what I would like to know though is will there be development between the three involved in the future before I get to heavily involved in this.
but I do have to admit I like the way you write I'm up to the [fun night] 1/3 and enjoying it somewhat sofar.
There are grammatical mistakes here and there but its not something that you halt you from reading.
From the first chapter, its intriguing and eye catching. There is a lot of mystery to uncover from the beginning that leaves you desperate to find out.
I am very interested to see the growth of both the story and the author's writing ability!!!
You need to shore up your grammar skills. You have a lot of missing commas, unnecessary addition of -ed, and wordy sentences. But considering you just started, it is okay.
Add more sensory details; you say forest, but what about it?
Your characters need more depth to them. What drives them? What weird quirks do they have? How do they deal with issues? etc...
Keep writing and you will get better, just never give up!
At first I did not dare to read this novel because of the strange description. But I saw a high rating and started reading this novel. I have never regretted doing this. This is a great story with elements of R18. Many stories lack such scenes, but the author corrected this monstrous mistake. I think everyone will be pleased after reading this story.
P.S. I do not recommend reading this story in the presence of other people and in tight clothes.
I would love to read more chapters of this book.
I like the story so far but the person translating it has been splitting single chapters and making it into multiple chapters. reading the raw you can see that where chapter 35 on here is it would actually be chapter 25 im the raw.
an average quality CN webnovel, brought down by bad quality machine translation, "translator" just pump out as many chapters as they can and didn't bother to edit, and correct any mistake. Don't bother to pay or vote for this novel just read free machine translated one.
Muy buena historia y desarrollo espero que la traduzca, porque es muy buena y más porque hay varias historias parecidas y no las terminan de traducir
HOW WAS THIS CHOSEN TO HAVE MORE CHAPTER this is literally Trash.
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thanks again so much and have a wonderful day and thank king for all your wonderful work kept us happy writing our own thoughts ghhjfddguiutrryuu7
curious about the continuation of this novel?
You can read the MTL version first on :
novelraw.blogspot.com
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Translation for free chapters are excellent. After the free chapter, it went downhill. It is still readable but not as consistent as the free chapters. For example, his first summon is called "yellow" then became "ah Huang" or it was called"yellow scarf soldier to "yellow bandana". it will rattle your reading immersion a little bit.