a really good novel, but I'm not sure as to whether the author has dropped it or gone on hiatus as it has been a while since they updated.
now if this is not an entirely new premise, then I don't know what is. an approach to invasions that's entirely unique, with all of the action u would expect from a death race. keep it up
Hey.. psst. If your just starting of reading. This is the story for you. You will love it. If your like 2-3 years into reading... nah. I mean yeah I got to like only chapter 12, but till that point. I felt like I was just reading events. A good story will make you feel like your reading a world. You know what I mean if you read it. Also Honestly, this is the authors first novel. Gotta give em props to that, his on a great start. So ema give u more stars just for that.
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this will include everything in one sentence .. the mc is cringe Japanese beta simp protagonist. and story is all over the place .. many situations doesn't make sense . .if you can handle it then go ahead and read it . but after 20 chapter I got very annoyed .
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Why this is so unpopular, I can't unterstand.This novel targets almost all of the clichéd scenes and makes them better or funny.This also hard to find.Hope author makes a good job on rewrite.
Good story with an “omg this MC is a idiot”. For a while he is a smart MC with luck with the ladies then he can’t figure crap out a few chapters later. And it’s really bad and obvious. Author leaves giant plot holes all over the place and the MC doesn’t seem to remember anything from more than 3 chapters before. Save your time it becomes crap after a while
I would so love to rate this story as a 5, however there are some key issues that ruin this story for me.The first major problem in this story is the writing quality. Now I'm not 100% sure, but I'm assuming the author English is a secondary language. The constant and blatant grammatical errors ruin 99% of the immersion of the story for me.The updating doesn't seem to be very stable.The story development seems to be fairly well done, it does need some work though.The character design seems to be fleshed out nicely. The author makes a strong effort to give his mc a strong background story that gives justice to things hes done/is doing.The world background also gets explained fairly well. Though there haven't been many chapters, so far this part seems done as well as can be.Honestly my biggest complaint comes from the writing quality. If the author could fix this, I believe he would have a solid story.
So if you've not looked at the tag and clicked on Hollywood one you should. This story is posted on Oct 30.....another story which is LITERALLY the same exact one almost except a few minor background details was posted weeks earlier....so either this dude is that author too or well he just copied and pasted and change some background and name details....I read the other one first and 13 chapters in this one is same basically so far including the time in history it starts, movies and child author.....
I know it’s a bit early on to give a review so I’m giving it a medium review which I hope is ok don’t want to be harsh love seeing fellow new writers but I see myself so much of myself in your writing style and personal wanted to give you something to be able to reflect on and some motivation to write I will read your story and I will be waiting to see if you to continue I have also commented on your chapters as well saying similar things but i wish to repeat in more detail.Good things1.You have the idea always important 2.you have ok grammar could use a little improvement but that’s fine we’re not professional writersThings you could improve1.Context matters build up a description of your character, new family, new world, compare2.cultivation isn’t everything as I feel a problem all novels especially young one who set themselves these massive cultivation realms with fancy words is they often have no meaning to a reader there just word so try and help the audience gain insight on what they mean and how strong each realm is don’t go into to much detail3.personally don’t like first person too much and I think you would find it easier to write in the 3rd (my opinion lol)Please continue to write I will read!!!Shameless promotion time Checkout blind saint as I’m currently writing it it’s not great but I think you might be good for you to read a style of writing that’s the opposite of your own
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