A solid 2. Great idea. But when you introduced the arena before even began to develop the life merchant story made me sigh. So much waste opportunities of a good story.So many loops holes. A will name a few that bother it me:-> The contract only specify that if he tell someone about him the contract became null. So what happens in that case ? The money magically returns to him and he keeps the gained life years ? The other party forgets about him ? Either case this magical ability will be very alluring to the underground world. If someone force to say who gave them money. You can imagine the consequences.-> Even in a offshore account he can't spend money in his home. He needs to launder money to appeared to be a legitimate gains. If not the government will be suspicious.-> What happens if someone ask for something that he can't do? What happens if he can't fulfill his part of the deal ? No alternatives explored.-> Range of the merchant world ? Somewhat we can deduce that is less than 100 meters while he follows the girls back her home.-> Body-fucking-change-pill and he offered that pill to a girl in a toxic relationship. Not even thinking about trans ? Fame wannabes girls/boys? This people will literally die for that opportunities. Even add a clause that if they reach fame they will deposit a certain percentage of money each month.-> You changed the requisite of omnipotent sight from lvl 2 to 3 from 10.000 to 1.000.000 and somehow the mc completed that in less than a month ? Bs.Sorry. Dropped the novel. Maybe even will write a similar but logical story since I like the premise.
The book has a great background on what has happened to humanity. The development of the main protagonist. Lastly, I can wait to see the rest of the story.
This is a intersting story from what has been written so far. I am intrested in what will happen next. What I say is my opion and suguestion to help your book become better so please don't take it the wrong wayFirstly for me, It was not scary. When I read Horror/Thiller books with are nomarly Steven King. I want to be right there with the MC expericing the horror and the diolage that is written now if given more details to the world and the backround to make me feel like i am there can work. The chapters that you repeated the same dilolage twice is a clever use of diloage and can be used if it is altered in such a way that it is from the other persons perpesive. In genreal this is a good book and has the potional to be a great horror book " If you want to be a writer, you must do two things above all others: read a lot and write a lot" Stephen King
most cring book I've ever read and not that much on this app but I've read a but load of books................................................
11/10, story may seem similar to another card related novel, but the story is 10x more entertaining. Best scene so far is when the MC figured out how to carpet bomb an entire compound with cows/bulls. Just hundreds of cows falling down from the sky, demolishing everything in sight. Now this is the content we need.
It's a copy of Lord of mysteries, but author used RPG class system fused with mystic. It's original and interesting idea. The problem is author is not doing it properly, it don't feel like 1world it feels like 2world fused forcefully. The so called mystery in this novel don't feel like mystery, its more like author is throwing a lot of unknown characters at the reader and then solve them one by one(and the concept of numbered artifact is 100% copy of LoM). So I would call it confusing characters rather than mystery plot. I hope author don't take it wrong way. I like it! But I just wish it could be better so I can love it.(I hope novel with perfect fusion of RPG and Mystic of LoM happens sooner or later).
Liking the novel so far. The grammar is great I only spotted a few small mistakes. The author is great at world building, there are many questions that are slowly getting answered and I find myself looking forward to what is happening next a lot. There isn't much filler and the story keeps progressing at a steady pace so far. I definitely recommend this novel.
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A blatant, worse version of "I'm Actually a Cultivation Bigshot". Everyone's an idiot, before MC evey girl is willing to just drop their panties, and MC is just so "unbelievably cool" when in reality, he's just ignorant.
it's a great read for me, I find it really entertaining and the translation is good, too. That's all I can say, it's nit the best novel but it's enough to pass ypur time and give you a good read.
Please tell me that this was not dropped! I just found it and fell in love with it. I want to see more of our MC's growth and story development. Loved everything so far, good job author-san❤P.S.: Please, PLEASE DO NOT DROPP IT!!!!❤❤❤❤❤
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