the book is really good with a lot of sarcasm. the storyline is interesting about a person being so obsessed with normalcy. but one only wants normal till they get a taste of the real power. I really like the story. Kudos to the Author
Filled with fake ratings, garbage novel that doesn't make sense, I can't believe there can be so many spammed 5 star reviews made by level 1 and 2 accounts. It disgusts me, made me waste my time reading this thing.
there is nothing good about this novel. its boring, a cardboard cutout of whats already been done before but there is a twist, he gets two rewards per check in, one for each bloodline. which makes of course no difference, like one reward through check in wasn't already op enough.i'll give it two stars. for those that have never read a check in system novel before, this might be a great story to read.
Great novel... MC who embraces the powers he just got even though they are demon powers.... The only bad thing about the novel is some important chapters and side chapters are patreon exclusive... Makes the novel feel chompy...
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Ouch. It's been almost 4 months since I started Divine Path System. My view on the story and my own writing took quite a drastic turn if I say so myself. This review is partially for self-reflection and partially to give the potential readers an intro as honestly as I can. I'll address the things I think I have done well and not done well from my own opinion, readers' response and feedback on discord. 1. Writing Quality: 3 Stars. Average. A. Prose: Prose wise, I'm average (me being generous). There is no artistic or flowery prose. I tend to write normal sentences. Use normal words. And I use short passages. B. Scenes: I try to provide the sensory details and paint a good picture of the scene. However, it took me a while to realize I'm not giving the scenes enough emotional depth. There is also a difference between what I see in a scene and what you, the reader see. Because I know the scene and then write it, I can see the complete picture. It's my job to make sure you can imagine what I saw and felt—the visuals, the emotions and everything—I did not do justice to the scenes. At least not up to the mark. C. FlowFlow is when you read a chapter without any breaks. I had problems with flow. Adding a sentence or two at some places could've helped the flow and smoothened the reading experience. I've noticed this only after a while. But even till then, the flow is not terrible. It's okay. There won't be any inconvenience in reading the story. 2. Stability of Updates: 5 Stars. Excellent. This is the one thing I can pat my chest and say. I never missed an update. I remember getting a vaccine shot and being sick for a day, yet stubbornly writing that one chapter. Maybe it's the power of streaks? I don't wanna break my streak.3. Story Development. 3 Stars. Average. A. Plot: Look, I like the story personally. No. I love it. It has some very good elements I want to write about. But the excellent parts of the story are clouded by the sub par ones. If I could do a redo, I'd change the beginning quite a bit. Not that I don't like what's written, but it could've been better. Some scenes, some decisions and some plot points—they bring down the story to 3 stars. Otherwise, I'd have given it 4 stars and I'm sure the overall story would be much better. B. TensionThis is something I struggled with and got an idea only after writing almost a hundred chapters. In the early chapters, tension stays high for long periods of time. It can be frustrating sometimes. I've worked on it and I hope to hear your experience. 4. Character Design: 2 Star. Below Average. A. Varian: Writing Varian gets a 3.5 star from me. He is his own person. He does everything because he wants to. Accepting the System's existence, chasing after an illusory but increasingly important girl, facing the unfairness yet not giving up—it's all his decisions. It's who he is.But I wish I could've written him better. At least in the early chapters, I should've shown his proactiveness more. While Varian as a character is 4 star, it's my writing that drags him down to 3 stars and I settled with 3.5 B. Main Characters: 3 StarsEnigma, Sia, Sarah, Kyle, Maya, Evander, Haedon for now. I should've written more depth and added nuance to them. I need to work on the dialogues and how they express themselves—How we talk reveals a lot about who we are. All characters have their own agencies—they have specific reasons for taking the decisions they take. But...I could've made them more real? It's a bit hard to express, but I guess that's it for now. C. Side Characters. 2 Stars. I don't think I should go all in on backstory and deep characterization for every single character. But I could've given them more characterization. More depth. 5. World Background: 2 Stars. I have mixed feelings about this. On one hand, the world of DPS covers a lot. On the other hand, I could've explored the Solar System and the special locations. How the world exists, operates and how day-to-day life in the federation is. Same goes for the eight Abysses. Well, not like it's the end. I will be exploring the world in the near future.There's also description of the world. My skills were a bit lacking at that time, but indeed, I should've described the world vividly—the worlds, the buildings, the locations and everything. Conclusion: The beginning can be a bit hard. But if you like the concept and look forward to what's going to happen, it gets better. I am learning from my mistakes and I hope I improve. Please tell me what you've loved and hated about the story. Be brutally honest. I can take it. You'll be doing me a big favor by being upfront about it. Thank you for reading.PS: Read the story and decide for yourself. This review is my own opinion. You might, to my own delight, love the story and claim it as your favorite. (haha)No rating, no review can tell for certain if you'll enjoy the story you are about to read. The only way to know for certain is to read and find out.
Another trash novel not the worth the time to read. Not even good enough to read on the toilet and I wouldn't even use it to wipe my a*s after mexican food.Dumba*s MC and dumba*s author.
I just don't get this book. There are brainless MCs, but of all the MCs I have ever encountered this one is the most self-destructive I have ever encountered.MC walks a path where resources and Cultivation techniques are provided for practically nothing. He isn't fighting for benefits,he has no need too, but just because he is stubborn he gets into conflict all the time.Then he goes around poisoning others for no reason or benefit. It is like he is trying to create as many blood feuds as possible.The MC was destined to be a winner in life but because he can't take a steep back, is needlessly evil and cruel, can't look at his own situation objectively and is courting death needlessly, he is destined to walk a stony path.Bdw. Side-Characters are cannon fooder and paper thin, world building is illogical and doesn't really make sense in the context of the story.
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So many unnecessary words.The grammar is terrible, the plot itself makes no sense, the main character is just extremely unlikeable, and the author can’t seem to stop saying things that don’t even need to be said.I mean, Jesus. If the main character makes toast, the author would give an extremely detailed explanation as if babies are reading this. The author is clearly trying to seem smart, wise, and philosophical, but it comes off as annoying, especially when it completely breaks the immersion.One second, the main character will be having a conversation, and in the next second, he’ll start talking to himself for half of the chapter just to come to a single conclusion.
Is they're a reason every Chinese novel has Qi in it?????? I mean it cool and all but it just doesn't fit here at all. Combining science, Qi/Mana, when it'll be the same novel even without it perhaps better. Like DC Comic's Doomsday only the starting point is the Weak Human genome instead of alien. However adding Qi just makes it weird, like this mistic energy "Qi/Mana" evolved everything else but not the Humans. If you used the prehistoric earth as a reference it would have been an awesome read, like the earth regressed now we have bigger animals. What a waste of a good story.
While I do like this kind of novel you can tell the author is bad about desperately trying to reach a word count. For example they will make a statement about the effects on a weapon and then make the same statement 4 or 5 more times as if to emphasize their point.