Part of a review swap, and at time of reading, there are 14 chapters.To be brutally honest, this genre is not my cup of tea. The word "suicide" itself turns me off, as I don't like anything remotely dark. Violence, is fine strangely enough.Anyway! On with the review.Writing Quality: English isn't my first language, so any minor grammatical erros wouldn't be seen by me. However, I would suggest Author to :(i) Ensure proper capitalisation of words(ii) Have more paragraphs, especially when it's a dialogue. Would make the reading smoother. When a paragraph is too big, those who read using an app would find the huge chunk of text off-puttingStability of Updates: 5* in good faithStory Development: It's certainly a good start and is developing well. You can see how the death of the sister was the catalyst to him turning out / becoming better. It's a unique perspective for me (can't say if this is new, or fresh as I don't normally read this genre). Character Design/World Background: So far, so good. The pace is there, the development is well.All the best Author. :)
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So I am writing this review after reading chapter 254 (such a touching chapter) l. To be honest I hated Kairen so much in the first few chapters, and that's because the transmigration books I read about mostly have their MCs move on quickly from their initial confusion, but that aside, his stupidity does add to the story, it's not that you get used to it, but it gets better over time. If I had a query with this book it would be the fact that you don't see his friends as often in more recent chapters. But since the book follows Kairen's POV you understand that except for Ariyan, Kain related things most things subconsciously become secondary to him. It's a fun read especially if you like mystery, action and comedy, so don't be deterred by the MC at the beginning ☺️
Parasyte System is an enjoyable albeit flawed power fantasy. Let me briefly unpack that. I have now read every chapter currently available on Webnovel, and I have to say, this is a mixed bag. I'll start with the good. The story is interesting. The backstory of the proliferation, The three classes and their different attributes is intriguing. The characters are charming. There is a lot to enjoy about this Webnovel. If the story ended here, I'd have no problem strongly recommending this story to anyone who crosses my path. Unfortunately, the story doesn't end here. There is a myriad of problems with this Webnovel. I'll now unpack the most egregious.Giving some credit where its due, for a non-native to the English language, the author is very promising. I've seen webnovels on this platform written by native English speakers done worse. That isn't to say this is done well. The biggest gaffes of this work isn't even related to the English language, but rather writing conventions. I'll start with the most unforgivable. The author begins the story writing in the first-person perspective. A few chapters down the line, the author moves into the third-person perspective. I understand the reason. Worldbuilding is difficult in the first-person. It isn't impossible, but it is difficult. The author made the choice to break free from the perspective he chose in order to easier tell a bigger story. The issue is, he never went back to change the first few chapters into the third-person. Chapters after the impromptu change, I was still unsure as to what was happening, who was narrating, who exactly we were meant to be following. I did eventually key onto the change in POV, however, were I not internally compelled to carry on, I would have dropped this webnovel immediately. It's not an easy fix, but it is a necessary one. The first few chapters really need to be changed to reflect the authors chosen POV. The next big issue, not fatal like the one above, but still bad, is the author's maddening choice to constantly repeat information that has just been provided, A character will say something, conveying information to the reader, the author will then repeat the information provided in dialogue in the narration. Why do this? It baffles me. It really detracts from the work, Breaking away from this convention is a small change that would radically improve this work. Another issue is that there is a lot of telling and little to no showing. Emotions are not conveyed through the use of creative writing, the reader is just told what the characters are feeling. This isn't as much of a problem as the two issues stated above, however, fixing it would really improve this webnovel.I'm certain that there are more issues with this webnovel, but that isn't to say that it's not an enjoyable read. Parasyte System is a diamond in a lot of rough. It would blind in its brilliance, but only if the author is willing to really polish.
I absolutely recommend this novel to everyone. It is one of my favourite novels and even though the plot starts a bit slow, if you keep reading few more chapters, you will realize it is definitely worth reading! The characters are well characterized an what makes this novel so interesting is the fact that it mix game elements with cultivation world elements.
Story has a good premise to it. The main character is pretty well developed. Would like to see more of world development though, since it's leaving to much to the imagination of the reader but overall not too much.
Just because the main character is overpowered is no reason to gloss over the moments that make the main character relatable, since the main character is so OP. Instead of focusing on increasing the main characters abilities, flesh out who he is as a person and where he stands in the world. Have the main character reflect on what he has done instead of needlessly slaughtering to get what he wants. Epic moments need to be deserved, not thrown in for the sake of the act alone.
Reading first 20 chapters lowered my intelligence, so i wanted to see how many people sticked to the story till the latest chapter. Not many and can't say i expected anything else. At the start it was all going good, but then that little girl appeared and i kinda knew it would go downhill from now on. It seems to be theme or more like an obsession with little girls that chinese novels have. They are always there to make the plot retarded to force MC into situation he wouldn't be in. It is always goes like this: 1. MC finds a little girl by sheer coincidence and out of all the kids that are dying before him you know he will save her. Not only because in the pandemonium somehow a kid voice was able to reach the MC, but also because the kid was crying while advertising her name which just so happens to MC dead sister name. What a coincidence!! Fuck all the other kids and people now he'll do everything to save her, even though he's out of shape, crippled, below average intelleigence guy with no foresight. 2. That little girl is very special. Apparently this one was 1 of 9 in the whole world, what a coincidence!! that our MC encountered her. 3. Suddenly MC will go to any lengths for that little girl because why the fu*k not, he has already died for her why not 100 times again and she's a kid who he fell in love for after 2-3 dialogues, can't abandon her now. Now this unhealthy nonsensical obsession will drive the future plot. 4. That little girl then will become the weak link/target of people who wants her 1 in a billion physique, or maybe when he's facing a god or some other sh*t, and her power will help him. Thank god he found her by coincidence in the start. 5. Apparently by another innocent coincidence he encountered a zombie way over the starter difficulty and got mortally wounded and infected while protecting the little girl and survived by just a sec again by sheer coincidence of girl having some sort of power and double personality which she conveniently wasn't able to use before, but did so now. All these coincidences in just a few chapters. Now as a seasoned chinese novel reader you already know that MC will spend his time protecting that little girl, wasting resources on her, and maybe eventually getting in relationship with her. What? You though little girls in chinese novels were for some Innocent reason? 9/10 expect it to happen. In the last scenario she was killed.MC is a retard as well. He apparently thought it was enough to prepare for doomsday with just stocking guns and food. Even an idiot would've noticed that they need more than that to survive, especially as a cripple. Was he thinking of just camping in car with limited resources that will eventually run out? Base of operation? Future food procurement? training? A google seach on how to survive apocalypse? Taking measure of system capabilities? A common guy would have searched the whole system store in his free time just out of sheer curiosity, but MC didn't. He only knew enough for plot's sake that he could buy space rings but didn't knew that he could buy skill cards and being a retard that he is, brought a car without ever thinking his retarded ass can't drive cars or even use guns to save his life. All these coincidences, and mc being a retard are just signs of bad writing by author's who can't think of better plot progession devices so they just use what everyone else is using. How is this story better than others infinite stories where Mc is in apocalypse with a little girl and a system? This one has apparently has a perverted system of some sorts for lulz i guess. Totally won't get old in 10 chapters. Good luck with your future works author.
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I've read hundreds of webnovels at this point but this is the first review I've ever given. Quite frankly this is one of the best novels I've read and it keeps me page refreshing, waiting for the next chapter with bated breath.This is a new and novel idea for a story with a system, through all my searches I have found no other approaching gaining wealth with a system in modern society quite like this.I implore you, dear readers, pick up this novel and you won't regret it, or at least you won't anything that fulfils a rise to wealth and power so excellently and innovatively; yet plain insight, anywhere else.If you don't read it for your own sake, I beg you, read it for mine so I can keep reading and the chapters continue to come.
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