A good story so far, although not much characterization or world-building has happened as of yet.
This novel is a emotional and thought-provoking journey about identity, memory, and happiness. The protagonist's struggles are relatable, and Jungkook's character adds a touching romantic element. The story raises important questions about the human experience, making it a compelling read.
My god, I don’t understand why this story is so highly rated. Sure, it’s got a decent plot but... it reads like it’s been Machine Translated. The first paragraph of chapter 1 alone is enough to show this, as the entire paragraph is a singular sentence. There’s little to no usage of periods, commas are everywhere, and much of the word choice makes no sense. It may seem highly negative of me to say this, but personally I don’t believe that a story with so little effort put into wording deserves any sort of positive response from us. If the author wants to elevate the story higher, they need to go back and fix the writing.
This novel fills me with mixed feelings. I enjoy the plot and the story development. I like the main character(*most of the time) as he is smart and can have things done when needed, and you want to follow his tale and see how he faces his challenges and overcomes them.Now, for the bad part.1- Writing quality: Poor, really poor. Constant conjugation errors in every possible way you can imagine. Poor spelling. Poor dialogues; sometimes we don't even know who is talking or whom is being talked to. Some sentences just don't make sense, because of how it is structured.2- Character Design: Decent at best. Besides the MC there is only one other character that really pops out (due to spoilers won't say his name).3- Female lead: Horrible character. Begins the novel as a spoiled little girl and remains as such. Keeps complaining on how the MC behaves, even though she knows he is an introvert and never had any friends previous to the "Fall". She doesn't even acknowledge her feelings for the MC, but keeps on getting jealous and lashing out on the MC, Plus she doesn't trust him to make the right decisions, and second guesses him every chance she has. 4- Side chapters - Too many chapters about non interesting characters, trying to better describe the situation, but failing miserably. On many occasions the MC's plot is moving, and then we have a chapter about side characters. Also, there is little connection in between the chapters, plus the timeline is really broken. We don't know how to fit such chapters into the story.5 - Time travel - Many chapters occur in the future, or are about memories form the future, etc, etc (you know how annoying time travel is), but they are not explained as such. when we realize they are form a different timeline we are half way into the chapter.6 - Allusions - Too many things taken from other sources, such as DC, Norse mythology, Greek mythology, etc. And sometimes the author simply copy and paste them. If you pay attention you will see that the MC relationship with his sworn brother Loki, is the same with Odin and the original Loki from the Norse mythology. Also, powers copied from DC that have nothing to do with the cultivation system in the novel.This is just my two cents. I can live with the grammar errors and bad spelling. I can live with copying things from other sources, since the plot overall is still good. But I just can't stand the Female Lead b*tch. It annoys the hell out of me and I just wish she would die.
This is a really brilliant novel with a great plot and understandable characters. Y'all should share with your friends. Like, you can't be selfish and leave this book to yourself only . It's really worthy of a five star. Bravo, authur
looks promising I am looking forward to more chapters
I am in love with the MC and how the story is going so far. Looking forward to how the story will unfold as I continue to enjoy the book??
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Great start! Can’t wait to read some more. looked into the the deeper meaning of their names...saya/sahayaka=happy and molasi=strength. The names itself may show the overall character development of the story.
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I read a total of 18 chapters, the first 5 could be considered descent chaps but from chap 6 plotholes, bad translation, horrible world building and contradicting character desings.This novel is just trash overall 1/5.
Does anyone know the raw name?..........................................................................................................................................