The story and characters are great! BUT the grammar is a big OOF!! You need to get an editor or hire a new one because there are a ton of errors that ruin the flow of the story. Work hard and don't give up!
Awesome novel.There are very few novel, which attracts my attention in this genre.It was hilarious and It was rate for me to get so much into it.Yeah, I think has a bit of problem with his tenses and singular and plural words.But I think it would improve overtime.Just don't drop it
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Interesting story. I love the family bond and Hei being the dutiful big bro. I don't know cultivation or generally read it, so this was new to me. The story isn't guns blazing, but the pace is logical and flows well. Well written with interesting characters. Could do really well here.
This book is so wooow and sad at the same time I can't wait to see how persey will survive in the fae land am glued to my phone 24 hours a day reading it
Mc is stupid,selfish,*****,dumb,ignorant. Reading this made me stupid.I wanted to read more when I started reading but mc got dumber and dumber
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It relies too much on its humor, which is a problem when it isn't funny. It's the "the MC is stupid," kind of humor, where you're supposed to laugh at the MC. However, when the mc is too dense to suffer the consequences of his own stupidity, it isn't funny. It's pathetic.
First things first, why he also called Hades. Another protagonist called Hades. What is with the helmet? Did he get that last live? Why is it different this life.
Hi! This is doris, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
I know this will not get picked but I still hope because this novel does have similarities with chrysalis but it is not a complete copy and is actually pretty good