It's Good... That's it.Nah, I'm just joking... The world building here is amazing, yup, really! especially when the author adds up engineering on his fantasy world. But I found something that turns me down :< The *** jokes are being abused here too much, and I know the author even said that he wanted this novel to be comedic, but it isn't essentially needed to be *** jokes right? it's okay to touch it on and I gotta admit that at first, It was amusing and hilarious but, as time goes by it became toxic to the story to the point that I skip chapters. (Not only that, I am a bit skeptical of the author. Well, you see, he clearly shows his fetishes on as* l*cking, and those big racks of his characters in the story, some *** jokes is a bit too much. In short, I don't want to offend the author but his writing shows his sexual desires, making me think that the author is a single who has not experienced real relationships... Please, author, don't get offended >.<) And that's not only the reason why I skip chapters. Some chapters are not that necessary to the story honestly, an example of this is the longest school entrance arc that I had ever read, yes the point of this is to add more and expand plot lines but man. Well, the start gets me hyped because of the uniqueness of the story, and I don't want review it fully because the story clearly isn't in the climax yet. But I do hope that the author improves the things that I've pointed out. it'll make the story enjoyable to read.There are many potentials in this story, I'm a writer too not here but on Royal Road... I am the same as the author who wants to improve English (well I want to improve my English grammar) and share our fantasy to inspire others. There are still good and fun or positive things about this novel, and there's a lot! my stars wouldn't be 4 if it isn't that great, right? But, fellow author, keeeeeep up the good work! and continue to inspire others!
So far a very interesting story. I like the style of writing.(140 characters, 140 characters,140 characters,140 characters,140 characters,140 characters)
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Really okay. I liked it. Early on so it is hard to tell where it will go? I do like how you can see how much care is being put into this story. Really good. Keep it up.
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This story is very nice with a strong storyline, nothing is out of place and the characters are unique. I would highly suggest this :3 well i hope everyone reads it
How is the girl gonna give him the bracelet. Will they meet again? I'm so interested in next cheap. When is the next chap be released. Did she started liking him
Awesome Story,Thanks for the hard work.?………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..
Overall a good story. A matter caution, there isn't much action in the early going in this story. Starts to increase a bit somewhere in the 40s. Spends a lot of time talking about his cultivation process. I like it, but it may not be for everyone.
I only rating this as FIVE STAR because....No Golden Trio being formed.The other fanfic Harry Potter and the Prince of Shadow were truly the most nerve wracking pain the a*s fanfic I've ever read on this site.So much bundled of hate I gathered to that wretched fictional character Ron.Seriously the author is ludicrous in giving more attention to that guy from OC's view like there's no tomorrow.So I dropped it and since then only reading Harry Potter fanfic that is worth without that despicable weasel.P.S. I despised Rowling for pairing Hermione to that redheaded idiot.
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