A very wonderful novel in many respects, most notably the fights or the development of the hero and other things. I will not end if I want to mention it. All I can say is that it is a legendary novel ????
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This quite an interesting read.Now review proper,Writing Quality - There are a bit some g-errors but it didn't hinder me from reading the whole story much.Stability of updates- I see no problem here.Story Development- First it start-off with quite an interesting start from the grimmers. Then the intro of the main male lead is also just right. They're a bit, showing a glimpse of his past about his parents and make me really curious about this. There is also some mention of the academy, I wonder if there will be some magic or supernatural academy trope here? That would be more interesting in my opinion.Character Design: The description of the mc, from his thoughts, you could already quite capture what kind of person he is, and from the incoming chaps, I know this would develop better. As for the others character, they have already some district traits to differentiate each of them and will be remembered by the readers so keep up with this.World background: I could see that the author has already planned out everything for this, so I got no problems with this.Overall this is already a great read with lots of potentials!Keep it up, author!
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The story has potenital But you can't make a bunch of OP pover in novelHe is demon in human body and has a higest cultivatio grade And thats okey and niceBut the problem is sistemSistem is too muchAnd story development is too fast He has a strong body And has a seled meridians Its a good startBut he didint get hunted by king or sectAnd he is calamity There si a lot of thing that need do remake 1. Take a slover pace Dont go to fast with story 2. He is to smart He dosen't have a comon sense. Thats okey but later he went to mental sect way/where noting is explained 3. You have to litle desprition about some thingI read it till you did start with a systemI didint read it laterBut this is my honest optionI know that you are 13 old So dont take offens but take a slover pace and read some novelWach how other autors write ther novelAlso read a coment Trust me you can learn a lot Of cos read a good coment where readers a brutaly honest and a spamsMy native isitn english Do a dont wach a gramars As long a can read it and unerstandIm okeyDont take offens but i belive if you want to be a beter author Then you need to work a lot
Great story! A game type genre and exciting because I like the mystery how the main character end up on this game. Cant wait for more chapter ?
i feel like the name of this stroy does not match perfectly with the actual story. it's really slow paced (no problems there). But I walked in on this story hoping for a more "Ruler"/Guild master setting. a good story all in all but I'm missing the "subordination" part of this, he only controls two people really and some NPC's. **: MC is a absolute idiot.
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This is amazing and I hope the other readers think so as well and I hope the future readers will love it as much as I do ???? the writing of this book is one of a kind
I can't take this anymore. Qi made their talk but it was not replied at all. PLEASE NOTICE OTHER READERS THAT NOVELUPDATE WILL START TO RE-UPDATE SINCE TODAY, started with The Battle For the Cowl (5).
The author does not provide how the system lvl up, he gives the mc unlimited supply without cost, and the MC for some reason a transmigrated person is an idiot. The MC knows that 1 tasteless drumstick cost 10 silvers but sell a magic sweet potato which is a powerful mana potion for 3 silvers.