barbaro como terminas la novela incompleta.... asi no... fuera de eso buena novela, pero de verdad dejaste a uno enganchado cuando se supone que empezará lo bueno
The title sound badass but the novel a let down the MC is stupid always do stuff that put his family in dangerous and don't take advantage of the girl with the holy body or whatever to increase his strength.
The premise of the story is very interesting! I’m loving the main character so far. There aren’t many chapters but the author has a creative way in stringing the world together.The author has a great usage of vocabulary and isn’t too repetitive. They’re grammar is also better than most writers on webnovel as well. Although the average grammar on webnovel is already bad to begin with so it probably isn’t saying much. Your grammar is good, but not great. Your good use of vocabulary helps immensely and didn’t tire me out which is a plus.My biggest issue is the long sentences. Areas where you could hv put a fullstop, is immediately continued with a another sentence. A whole paragraph could be one long sentence. I could hardly remember what I just read.It’s better to cut down some sentences short. Long sentences are not always better. Sometimes short sentences give more impact.Also, the average reader can only remember up to 6-7 words, 10 at most. And as you get better, it increases. However, the average reader on webnovel aren’t even native english, let alone very focused. So putting fullstops when needed should be taken into account.
For the love of God please don't add any romance or harem. That would ruin the story.....................Btw great work, keep going, new take on fiction and I like it.
A well structured story with wonderfully developed characters. The story is nice and easy to read, very interesting too. I'm looking forward to future updates.
the story was a good time waster, it was fun at times and a bit of a chore at others but overall it was decent that was until around 400 chapters or closer to 500 the author seemed to not know what to write about and just started describing things and stretching the story, the whole vacation arc was a disappointment and it shouldn't exist, I dropped the novel after that.
one of the gems in fanfic genre............................recommend everyone to read...........................have daily updates i'll give u spirit stones
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752 reviews, seems legit right?I hate how you can’t trust reviews and have to read the novel.How could this happen to me, I’ve made my mistakes, I’ve got somewhere to run.Cya o7
Wow just wow Correct me if I'm wrong80+ chapters only for the events of sth around 3 of 4 days after getting systemThe cheat code is op so the author tries to put limits on them and make the story more fun which works
Kudos to the author. Nice write up
needs a 2nd!