Too much shark jumping + confusing situations = not quite as easy to read/follow. Would have liked to read more but unless the content gets rewrite or translate, not much chance of getting onboard again.
Lengthy first chapter, but tis a good thing :) Concept is interesting and fun, dialogue and action are well written. Keep it up author, look forward to reading more :)
Even though it is the start. I can see potential in the book. I hope to see more of it in the future. The writing is not the best but it is of good quality. I can follow up without getting lost. I love it.
Wow! This is a great start, it made me want to keep scrolling to find out what’s next! Keep up the good work :)I like how both siblings care for one another, and loved each other ‘till the very end.
Ahem, Author here.First of all I have to thank you for taking the time to check out my work. It means a lot to me.Now, as the author of this book, I am obliged to give a review of my book that points out what you can expect from it.Can you expect superb writing quality? Yes! I personally rate myself quite high(I'm not gonna put a scale), and others have told me that my writing quality is quite decent.Updates will be daily for as long as I can imagine.The story development, as it is with my other books, if you've read them, is decently paces, not going too fast, not too slow.My characters are dynamic, and I hope you can learn to like and understand them as you read them.As for the world background, I have a lot planned out, but you won't see too much of it in the first few chapters, as those chapters focus on our main character, Mian. All I can say it that there is tension between the demi-humans and the humans.I hope you all support me on this exciting journey and that we can all reach our goals together by the end of this journey!
After reading first 20-25 chap. I thought it was ok . But now I think it's waste of timm?...........................................................................................
We're no strangers to loveYou know the rules and so do IA full commitment's what I'm thinking ofYou wouldn't get this from any other guyI just wanna tell you how I'm feelingGotta make you understandNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youWe've known each other for so longYour heart's been aching but you're too shy to say itInside we both know what's been going onWe know the game and we're gonna play itAnd if you ask me how I'm feelingDon't tell me you're too blind to seeNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give, never gonna give(Give you up)We've known each other for so longYour heart's been aching but you're too shy to say itInside we both know what's been going onWe know the game and we're gonna play itI just wanna tell you how I'm feelingGotta make you understandNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbye
Story jumps from plot to plot and has very little build up of events or world. Grammar is good and I never fault a writer for updates, unless they make promises they don't keep.
This book sounds pretty good so fare I would enjoy reading it when it gets published.It needs a little bit of editing but so far it sounds pretty good. This book reminds me of a Greek god type of book good work man sounds.?
I would never say no to genshin impact story and I give this story a good rating hoping that the author will update more frequently so that more people will be read this story. Good work author
Before I start this review I at the time of writing this have read up to chapter 150 out of 166 so marking this as spoiler for those who will read the reviews before reading this story. So if you don't want to be spoiled even after the spoiler warning then this is the last chance to turn back. (If you want to get my true opinion on the story you can just skip to the end if you don't want to read all of what is below)Overall this story has fantastic potential due to a great world that isn't your standard copy paste kind like in other stories. I know a lot of people had issues with the POV changes and the author addressed it on how they will handle it and how we the readers should. Which is great that the author is actually taking the time to read the reviews to get better and see what could be improved upon or what we the readers are pointing out, makes you feel like the author truly wishes to get better not only for themselves but for us as well so we can enjoy the story even more. With that being said I did have some issues with the POV changes but I've grown to appreciate some of them like whenever it switches to what the church (Pope or Saintess) are up to is great in my opinion since they are a major force in the world so it is interesting to see how things are developing on their end. Also with J&X without the POV changes to them we would be lost on why they are brought into this world but at the same time you could've saved that and made it something of a goal for Cera to track them down and find out what has happened rather than reveal it all to us the readers already either way is fine though I have no issues with how you did handle it. But others I feel I have no need to care for like creatureman and ghostzero I understand their story but I'm more interested in seeing Cera continue making progress since you've hooked me on seeing him develop more considering he is now I guess with them being brought over to Gaia truly not just a character that is the son of Michael but truly the son of Michael now so the time used on them just feels wasted as they were even introduced as just mercenaries hired in the war early on but given no reason to care for them after that short time with them then. Same with other alliance leaders I can understand the want to introduce them so we can see what is going on with other players but we the readers don't really have much reason to care for what others players do. It would be okay here and there or mainly only for major things like the roaming raid boss raid if Cera isn't apart of it. But as I've read farther I have noticed POV changes less frequently so I guess you already kind of realized you don't need to do it as much but do it enough that we still get to see what else is going on in the world. Keep it up though I am noticing an improvement in the quality which is nice to see. Something new I noticed which is really weird is Cera's mindset on things like when he meets up with his family after they all get transported to Gaia he doesn't tell them he is the divine class player everyone is looking for and doesn't do it until he is leaving. Yet he tells Sally a random half elf girl that was working in a inn with whom he has no attachments to at all but decides on a whim, Hey lets take her along with me help her get a legendary class and better gear also tell her that I'm the son of Michael, like it feels like such a odd thing to do she is a pretty weak resident of Gaia as well compared to others he has met so why tell her a nobody when even in the beginning of the story he was putting so much emphasis on making sure as little people knew about this. So she a tag along gets to know faster than his own family baffles me. Also I double checked and didn't find anything but there was no reason for him to bring her along with him it feels so forced like its trying to be his potential love interest and it hurts to see because it feels so forced. Yet we as the readers once again have no reason to care for her as she was abruptly introduced as just an inn worker no one special and not multiple encounters and enough time to want to see something between them. Also doesn't help you also had Hailey say what his type was to Snow Princess earlier and she very clearly is far from his type. So even after her suddenly catching feelings for someone she also didn't know until recently and then forcing herself on him and him somewhat letting her do it after rejecting her just didn't sit right after knowing he has a type and its not her and he has the strength to have not let that happen apart from her already being some random girl he's decided to pick up and give things she never would've had without his help and knowledge. For now though it just doesn't feel right how he told her such a big secret and then did so much to hold it back from his own family for no truly good reason. I get there is the chance of them being found out to be his family and forced to say who he is but they're currently trapped on a separate continent for who knows how long with only players and no player will want to do anything to his family since I'm sure they all know that there is no chance any of them could threaten him or would want to get on his bad side considering the power he has especially compared to the other legendary class holders. Who knows maybe later with more encounters and overall time with her around she may grow on me more but as of now I'm not a fan of how this whole time with her has been. But with all of that said there isn't much else that I could say that is bad about the story since it's still so young so the chances of it improving are very likely from what I have seen so far. I do wish to see more of that urgency that he had early on though to get stronger fast since it seems like he has last that in these chapters with Sally he could be doing his quest but is wasting time with this when he already will be calling on Fenrir to help him with the boss so if he a divine class who is a higher level with a legendary sword on par with swords like excalibur and durandel is deemed as far too weak to complete his quest then what help would a person who will only get a legendary class with fewer levels and worse equipment be able to add (maybe I'll find out as I keep reading but I guess you get my point). But he used to just go from one quest to the next and then to the next with the sole goal of getting stronger and leveling up quick yet now only tier one with no mana aura and sub level 100 it's not him being arrogant but it feels like it feels like he might be getting too cocky even though he should know full well that even with a OP class and OP sword it means nothing in front of the hermit, grandmaster, nelli, and Fenrir. He is still very far from being there but still you would think with his knowledge of the game from 5 years of it in his past life that he would be doing so much more and be on an even faster track to getting even stronger as he gets stronger so he can do even more things. Overall to wrap up this review since its getting too long I'll say these things about it. Should you read this? Yes you should! Why should you read this even after all I said was mainly things wrong I had with it? The author may make mistakes but they are improving and want us to help them improve so they actually care about this story and want it to improve for our enjoyment as well instead of just doing this to just do it and listen to their readers on top of that it is a great story with a cool world and a MC that makes steady progress in getting stronger and stronger! If that still hasn't convinced you to read it well I'm positive you will find yourself reading more and more even if you get mad about some stuff like I did I still found myself wanting to know more and wanting to know what happens. That is just how this story is the author has done a great job in making an interesting world that is filled with a lot of wonder and questions that you will be excited to see if they get answered I know I'm excited to see where this story will go and how this story will further develop! SO READ THIS STORY!
This story is a "turn off your brain and enjoy it story". It's a classic: VRMMO story, the world is real interesting and you can have a lot of fun reading it, but there are such better stories to read of the same genre in this website. This story relies on random bullshit plot armor to progress on every single chapter. the protagonist personalist is a human equivalent of a bag of garbage. He is not evil and calculating cool mc, but instead he is just a giant asshole which everyone loves for no reason. The author is constantly buffing and nerfing the protagonist through random plot bullshit events that come out of nowhere. Too OP: here some random plot bullshit to nerf him, Too challenging:here is some random plot armor to help you. Even when there is an explanation for the plot armor, it usually just dumb and forced. He also likes to tell stupid lies, when telling the truth would often be more helpful and less troubling.