super well written novel.
I enjoyed reading it until he got to college ....and thats when the plot got kinda strange...
however my advice to the author is to make the main character more consistent (which would improve the progression of the plot significantly). Your MC dabbles in too many things and then abandons them, and he is a little too perfect. Plus there are some major plotholes pushing the plot just to show off the MC's perfect skills and Gary-Stuness.
Take the time to develop his decision making and the thinking that goes into his actions. After reading for awhile i found the MC behaving like a drastically different person every chapter as if he has a split personality disorder. Please to slow down and justify the MC's actions, things happen too fast and for no reason other than his justice-boner. Let the MC enjoy his newfound freedom, I don't understand why you would make him basically return to his old profession when he has limitless potential.
Overall this is down to a matter of taste, but to other readers i really do recommend you read this novel as it is significantly better than most novels you find on this site and has plot elements for everyone.
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-Male MC
-Smart MC
-Overpowered MC
-System
-Weak To Strong
-Transport To Other Worlds
-Kingdom Building
-Unique Cultivation Method
-Cheat
-Loyal Subordinates
-Teacher
-Magic And Swords
-Sudden Strength Gain
-Money Grubber
I've read to ch 160 and all i can say is the mc is a hypocrite.And not only that it feels like fls and side characters just accepts whatever the mc says.i mean what was so special about him that all these girls where in love with him before he got powers.And every fl says to new Harem members that he is very gentle and what not.And he even has underage girls in Harem.And it just feels like there is no logic when mc is involved.And the mc turns down a girl just because she is aggressive in expressing her love and the fl says to her that she has to change her personality if she want to be with the mc.the mc is more like a villain if you ask me.its ok for the mc to be aggressive but not a fl.Also most of the things he does are stupid but the author just make it seem like it's a intelligent thing.oh and the world background is not that well done.
MC and his companions decide to set out to Alchemy City to go and meet the MC's master. You would think that once they get to the city they would be able to find him. NOPE!!! It is a 75+ chapter filler until they finally find him. WTF!!!!!!!!!! Why even state that their main goal is to find his master at the city if it is going to take over 75 chapters to finally find him? The author makes you sit there wondering for over 75 chapters when he is going to finally be able to meet his master once more. The entire time I'm just half a$$ reading this to get past these fillers to find out that it is going to take another 50 chapters, from where I have read up to, to finally meet up with this master once more. I don't even care what is happening in these chapters because the author got my hopes up that he was going to meet his master and start onto the next section of the story plot. This kind of completely detracts from the story when an author gets your hopes up like this and then puts 75+ chapters of filler in.
Nice read so far. The writing quality is good, the world background and power system seems pretty solid also, the only shortcoming I think is the problem of the system reveal. I'm gonna believe the author though, I believe that the reveal will be epic, I recommend this guys. Also, please don't drop the book author.
MC still the same... And loves arguing with opponents in battle... is also complete trash who can't deal with returning enemy he already defeated... Thinks with his jiji too much
Retarded weak MC thinks more about getting p**ssy than getting op and dominating the world with his system
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I enjoyed it till first volume but after it went downhill.It is only my opinion.If anyone wants to read it they can try it.
It's good i hope it get picked up. honestly the story is really interesting with nonhuman heroines (weapons) yeah it is unique because the mc power is basically like turning weapons into girls. this is suit my taste
Sigh, so much potential wasted
I read the entire raw and it is essentially completed so don't feel sad about it being on hiatus.
This novel is very good. It takes place in Japan which if you understand the character of many Chinese writers you will understand why that is so refreshing. There is very little in the way of character development, and ******* is pretty much nonexistent but its an enjoyable read nonetheless. I would highly reccomend. The uukanshu raw google translate is pretty good too so definitely don't hesitate to keep reading.
I really like how you started the novel, with that 'old hag' can't imagine what our mc felt in that moment... grammar is excellent, didn't find any error, the reading flow is perfect too! i didn't have to stop to re-read some parts. Overall i recommend this novel :3
* — Need to work.
** — Not bad
*** — Satisfying
**** —Excellent
***** — The best Webnovel can offer.
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Note: Don’t mind the grammar, I’m in hurry, so.
Writing Style — I will assume the author is not Native English base on the writing. Tense, comma, filler words, and dots are out of place. Furthermore, the Author likes to switch words for some reason. Sometimes, confusing to read. But still a readable novel — 3.5 / 5
Story Development — Pretty much decent. After he reincarnated back in time, the plot moves right after. However, to my opinion, the plot is just too fast. In one chapter, the mc meets a Core Member of this organization called ‘God’s Legion’, which will become terrifying in the future according to the author. Despite the Author telling us God’s Legion is scary, the members aren’t, at least from what I’ve seen when he meets one of the members.
The Author even bothers to fed us information about this guy telling us that he was scheming and Mc suffered ambush from him bla bla bla, but then died few chapters after his appearance.
Is this really the scheming and crafty Fang Chen? Hell, he even looks at the Mc with arrogance when he saw him. If I was scheming and crafty, I would approach the Mc, befriend him, and know about his background and such as after acting. But what did I see? Author telling us Scheming Person yet instead portrait the usual ‘Stupid Arrogant Young Master Fang’. Show not tell. Telling us is like promising us such character but showing is portraying us that character. Instead of telling us ‘He is Scheming’, show us what made him ‘Scheming’.
Also, Fang Chen is a future member and strategies of God’s legion, thus killing him after his appearance would affect the entire plot. By killing such a character, it made him irrelevant to the story. Take note, God’s Legion would be the hurdle the protagonist has to overcome in the story. This kind of hurdle, God’s Legion Members should be relevant to the plot and should appear with decent intellect. As for Fang Chen? Meh, he’s not. Foolish and stupid. I even doubt if he really was a Member of this so-called God’s Legion.
Also as a reader, I wouldn’t care about such information if this guy would die a few chapters later or held no importance to the story.
As for plot holes, I notice lots of them. For instance, the Mc was able to obtain Kill Points by absorbing Pills. Take note, pills have different grading and their effects also differ from the grade. So by telling us experience gain from pills is base on Mc’s luck makes no sense. But let’s not talk about that. Back to the point, ‘Kill’ basically means to slay and slaughter any living creature. However, gaining ‘Kill Points’ from absorbing Pills is an error and violation of the rule laid by you, Author. By writing ‘Kill Points’ instead of ‘Experience’ means you set the rule for the protagonist leveling through slaughter. But in this case, you show us Mc gaining Kill Points from Absorbing Qi which is a no-no.
For other plot holes, it will consume time explaining, so I will leave it in the hand of the Author to find those. For this, I will rate 3/5, on account I didn’t read all over the chapters available. Who knows the others might appear not too stupid and Plot Holes might not Plot Holes in the first place.
Character Design — As for the other characters, though lacking, let’s not talk about it.
Let’s focus on the Protagonist.
TLDR; No Changes!
Details: He died from fighting and ambush in his previous life, which I thought the protagonist would be cunning and cautious after experiencing that event. However, there are no changes at all. After arriving in the Lower Realm, all he did was act arrogant and stupid. By basically sitting in the center of a Restaurant, no doubt will attract attention. Bang! It did attract attention. Furthermore, it was a notable figure of the younger generation. The younger generation also wants to sit where Mc was sitting?!?! Coincidence? Or Forced Plot?... And guess what happened? Mc held him in contempt, sneering, and provoking him for no reason. Also, showing off wealth in the restaurant? Isn’t that basically attracting attention? Didn’t he die from being careless in his previous life? No matter where he is, even in the place of weakest, he should have been cautious. Why now gaining a second chance, he still a stupid, usual stereotypes xianxia protagonist. For this, I will rate 2/5. Need to polish more.
Update Stability — 5/5. No need to explain.
World Background — Author feeding us info dumps. Most of the paragraphs I read in a chapter mostly contains info. Info. Info. And Info. For having a good concept, I’ll rate it — 3.5/5.