Perfect story! The writing style, the flow, etc. Everything is perfect. Keep bleeding author!
This story has a lot of potential to become a famous fanfic and I hope this story does not dropped?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
I hope its get pick, story is very good, and i like the main characterGet pick,..............................................................
Do you know how confident I am in my writing for a somewhat fan-fic? Mad confident. Like even if my writing was a level lower, it would still be much better than more than half of the original works/fan-fictions.Stability? Pffft. If I can't think of something original, there is always that cliche plot which most people seem to find as a guilty pleasure, so you'll be fine!Story development? Lol please, read the first chapter and tell me do you get the usual flashback of the "I met God by dying on the way home by truck-kun and yadadada," no. ?STRAIGHT?TO?THE?POINT?Character Design! Mindless Harem? Ew, I'd rather go watch some hentai or something. But I love the arrogant young master cliche though, let's be real here, face-smacking is gold.World Background. Let me tell you this, ?CULTIVATION?NOVEL?Yeah, you already know there will be multiple worlds and I promise you, I will do my serious best to make it seem realistic, fantasy-wise of course, so you can picture things better.
There were minor punctuation and spelling errors here and there.Plotwise, the story is intriguing and fascinating. I love how you portrayed the MC as a character who prioritises his family's safety above himself.I hope he manages to survive and somehow protect those he holds dear in those trying time.*For punctuations, if you have already used "...?!" then there isn't much need to put a comma behind the sentence unless its a phrase or dialog.There were some errors as well where you used "your" instead of "you're". You're basically means you are... or something while your is used to symbolise something belongs to you.Same goes with the word "his" and "he's" that you wanted to use.This are just pointers for you, because I really enjoyed the story.
If you are looking for a new book that is lyrical at times as well as philosophically challenging without pandering or becoming formulaic, this is it! I was vaguely reminded of House of Leaves by Danielewski, as I don’t recall being challenged like this since attempting to read that cult (now) classic.
was searching something like this for so long Je suis content d'avoir trouvé quelque chose de génial, je vais le terminer en une nuit! ⏱️?
Good novel I would recommend it but author you should change this to the fanfiction section. ..........................................................................................................................................................................................................
Arthur's character development is getting better and better. I didn't expect him to present it in this detail, every side character contributed to Arthur's character change.
I may be wrong but It's like a Death game or Squid game theme.. But I know it will be a different plot and a nice story shall keep me hooked.The Story: √The writing style: √The Character: √It may not be the best but It could turn out great! I will be back on this novel and waiting for the next chapter!Keep out the great work, Mr. Author-san?
A kingdom bulding story in a cultivation world context ? A polygamous guy who will spread his genius genes of cultivation (future genius because yes intelligence is a form of genius) ? Where is the author of this story so that I can call him grandpa ?!
The best novel that has been here for a good while, nice. It has some faults but it's not bad at all, at least by webnovel standard.******