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And, apparently to save Ellen, she rushed forward, seized me by the arm, and with a certain degree of willingness on my part, drew me out of bed, saying—
"It is not what you think we were just not able to sleep!" said angrily Lucifer.
"Within the Bermuda triangle an Island is said to be existing and those creatures you read are seen there. Some people were able to find a way to go in and out and now there is a school that is built for both the beings who lives in there as well as humans that are chosen to enter." Carl continued.
"... Sure. Come in."
Yama couldn't help but look at Ying Yue and thought when has he ever mentioned that he had a teacher but then couldn't help but remember the incident where he saved her brother.
Well,to be honest,early story is good,Its not really that bad in the middle,but i think,this story is good for me.I was hoping you could detail more on certain part.Just my personal review,i think it worth unlock the chapter.By the way,keep up the work.
Hello author! I would like to clear up some doubts... they are as follows: will there be NTR in the work (I hope not), is the FMC Yandere? or possessive? Finally, does the work contain lemons?
romantic book ...very very romantic so good to hear
writing quality is bad but I have read worse than this. anyway not a bad webnovel to read if you want to pass time. anyway it is free..
Sorry i couldnt fulfill your expectations But i hope you StIll enjoy so provide me feedback if possible. But i am very sorry for the inconviencr thank you comrade
I’m doing this review for the author because he requested help in improving his writing. First, I know that it is hard to give a story a rating based on only a couple of chapters and you are new, but there is much that needs to be done. The grammar of the story is bad. I’m not sure if English is your first language but there is quite a bit of incorrect grammar in your chapters. If English isn’t your first language I give you props as I personally know how hard it is to write in a second language. The punctuation is not done very well. There is much that could be fixed, but the easiest thing is to break up the page with paragraphs. After you finish a thought you start a new paragraph, otherwise it feels like a run on sentence. The story is only 2 chapters long, so at this point I can’t really say much as far as character development or even world background. You did make an attempt at setting the preface of the story, but I feel the grammatical errors made it less than it could have been. I can’t really comment much on update frequency or anything either. The storyline has a similar feel to many of the online novels so I can’t comment yet if you will put your own spin or twist on things and have a truly original feel to it. I believe there is potential but you definitely have a long way to go. I hope this review helps you godtierfreak, and don’t give up. I’ll check on your novel at s later time to see how it has improved.