its not all that bad but for me it slowphase sucks i dont like love seperation thingy and system is so useless might aswell dont have concept and idea is awesome but plot progression is bad 11 chapters in gave up there might be peaple liking this book
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Perhaps my biggest issue is the lack of any descriptions of either settings or people. As a reader, you have no idea what any of the characters look like beyond some of them being simply described as "jade beauty". No hair/eye colour, hairstyle, clothes, places or settings are described, nothing about the architecture, décor, I'm not even 100% sure on what era this is set in or the current level of technology.Additionally, up to chapter 40 at least, there isn't any real sign of an overarching plot, beyond some vague hints in chapter 1. There is some conflict with "young masters
Leaving a review to the fun, fast-paced novel. You can say this is more of a 'light novel,' just from thoughts, the author colours his world. Just from the character talking to himself, revealing his feelings. I don't play too much with the system but every system I read is great and makes me go, "I wish i have a system to fawn my crush," and this novel had it. Keep on writing, story have to be told and ends.
I am really interested in this story, the way the story is narrated is soo nice, i love it??, i hope you will win , waiting for more chapters??
An amazing work of craft, the Mc is not a simp for women and is ruthless when he needs to be. He has his priorities straight, and the story is going strong.
exp is my sword and I am it's wielder. Push me to level 4 and I shall be your benefactor. so I pray that you hit the like button and give me my exp Exp amen
Every time the main character opens his mouth, I can't help but laugh. This has very original plot, world and characters in my humble opinnion.I especially like the main character and his inner struggels to try to move the plot in the direction he wants it to.
The background is good and it makes more sense than most novels you see, but it has been a while since I‘ve seen a MC this dumb and ungrateful. He gets a system that generates items so high wuality that they’ve never existed, and not only does he take it for granted, he constantly complains about how it doesn’t do anything for him. Without it he’d probably be dead in a ditch because he was pretentious with some gang boss or something, with it he’ll probably be dead I Ditch because he was pretentious with the leader of a country. Great potential, but the MC is such a dimbass that it ruins the whole thing.
honestly I don't know how to write reviewI like it,simple as that
This novel had come across my radar multiple times but I always kept it in my list of books to read later. I had never really read any books on ghosts, so while it sounded interesting it wasn’t a novel that was considered my kryptonite. Come October, I finally decided to read it cause I love spooky season and I was totally in the mood for some thrills. Well, I ended up purchasing all of the chapters at once after the free ones because I became obsessed. By obsessed, I mean I finished reading up to the current chapters in three days. I would’ve finished it sooner too had I not had to work. It was just that exciting. Not gonna lie, the grammar isn’t perfect but it’s not bad enough for it to detract from the storyline or leave you confused. The story is riveting, the characters are interesting and have depth, and the ghosts are super freaky! There’s been a few scenes where I almost killed myself by dropping my phone on my face. Just so you know, this novel is primarily fantasy with romance lightly dusted on it like powdered sugar on a funnel cake. It’s there, but it’s not the main dessert. The ghosts take center stage, but you won’t even miss the romance because the main characters are in dire need of some personal growth and the female lead is just bad AF on her own. The characters have so many twists and turns, so don’t expect cliches. There are so many things that keep you engaged in the novel, which is a testament to how good of a creative writer the author is. So if you like: ☑️ a strong female lead☑️ a cute bun☑️ character growth☑️ ghosts☑️ scary stories☑️ unique storylinethen you’ll enjoy this novel.
yesterday i thought i had seen everything, today i saw a fanfic with pay wall.What kind of world are we going to leave for the next generations ...?