A very good read, a bit confusing/unclear at times but i still would recommend it! Also one of the most original books on this website. Well done to the author for writing something of this standard.
I've read only ~40 chapters in MTL, so this novel might be better than I think. (but it might be worse :D)It starts well. Not OP system, clever MC. But then MC starts coming up with super innovative ideas, which actually should be almost obvious for others(e.g. assigning ids to armors to be able to identify manufacturer). At first, it seems not bad, but after 3-4 "innovations" it gets rather annoying than fun. And long descriptions of those innovations don't make it better.
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Some part of the content seems to be.. plagiarized from some other novel (the part about policewoman and dead driver)?Other than that, it seems to be a harem. And it develops very unnaturally at that. He met a policewoman who didn't seem like an easy pick. When she invited him to be her training coach to a gym, they only started & acted as friends. 5 chapters later they kiss and she says stuff like she'll do whatever he decides and that she's on his side and he suddenly acts as if it's already his decided wife. Like.. what the, where's the development? The girls in the other world are also EASY: first meetings and their cheeks are already red, they admire him, fall in love and would probably have nothing against being banged by MC. Oh and by the way, his only company in the other world are so far 3 girls and 0 boys. There is that male servant, a senior brother, a master, or that beggar who disappeared, but they don't accompany him in his daily life. Other guys are portraited as enemies- be it pig demon or some h*rny bullies.At least it's not a world of zombie apocalypse he's switching to, to build his harem and b*ng women he saved left and right which is the case for other novels in this genre (e.g. "I Have a Mansion in a Post-Apocalyptic World"). But in my opinion it's only slightly better, mostly due to absence of s*x, r*pe and rac*sm (am at chapter 66). But author often mentions how big of a beauty some girl is, her eyes, her face, her figure, her clothes. That's a red flag... As for harem, it's pretty much 1 woman in real world, 2 women in other world, that's 3 for now. Another brothel girl randomly inviting him to give him happiness, plus some other random, side chicks that would want him to be their boyfriend.
This Godly existence is now opening his malevolent dormant eyes to see flow of the fate again and shall deem this piece of work worthy of his Hollyness.
The story is just...bland. No one has any character to them, they are cardboard cutouts at best. The world is seemingly the same as ours so it isn't interesting. The plot and events are all very cliche and normal. I tried a few times to get through more chapters to see if there was something better behind this but it is just more of the same. There isn't anything terrible about this story. It is readable just boring.
It's going on the right directionNo kid wish fullfillment with a harem of 500 virginsTry to lead the plot through innovative and original ways and not make him a victim that suffer and follow the flow.I don't know if you can go full racist (chinese does it in most modern novel against the japan though) but it could be fun.
Seems pretty good so far. I've seen a lot worse on this site, so... maybe my score is a bit high. But honestly, I don't think it's a bad story and would recommend at least giving it a try to see if you like it.
Great story. The plot is very niceThe character design is almost perfect because of the mixture of teenage experiences. I think you must also make the character tougher to help with his development.The grammatical errors are alittle too much!Make sure to edit your story before you post them.However, your story is very nice and even though I don't really like martial arts stories, yours is the first one I really like.Keep I up!
Fun lazy mc slow life so far I like
Why did you people vote for this book that there are a bunch of them already.