it would be better if someone help in editing .. but still thank you for sharing
CH 547: ok wow, this is the first time that Chen Heng legit just admitted to being a world traveller right? before the closest he ever got was when he was taking people from the Curse world to the Gods World while claiming to be another follower of the holy Son.
I like author's logics behind how the FL's classmates behaved and how the FL is planning to cope with life after her rebirth. Plot progresses rather slow though, 23 chapters in and nothing significant really happened as of yet.
thank u for the wonderful story i hope to read more of Agatha please give her more attention and exposure i wanted to know her back story with samantha and takumi
Absolutely bussin', I don't know if it's because there is a lack of good one-punch fanfic or what but I like it, and I want more fanfic similar to this.
Here we go. I’m at around chapter 85. Loved how it started, author covered the basics, why the MC knows this and that,etc. I love the gaming elements novels, and the mystery with the character that dies with a couple of great items but not breaking balance completely is done well.Now unfortunately it gets worse. The MC is introduced as a veteran gamer of various VR games, with at least some training in martial arts. Then as the game keeps goings he forgets more and more of this gaming knowledge (note, im ok with him not being an expert or godly reflexes,etc, but not evolving as fast as you can inspect, making noob mistakes and forgetting basic gaming elements… I hate when you dumb an MC). We add to that a helper, a guide in the form of a fairy. I like that, even when she does not tell you everything, but only if the reason is because she can’t (rules). Defenetly not because of her ego, snappy remarks, rudeness, sense of superiority, etc. And the MC reactions being to act timidly and senseless. I also did not like him keeping a guy who gets into trouble to hide under you after throwing the rock. Really? That’s the companion he wants to stick with?Finally, I am going after starting a quest where he knows he is being manipulated, knows a solution (kill him or blackmail him back, or at least tell the truth about the quest) and still does nothing. Once this issues are solved the novel can be quite good. Good idea, good background, good writing and stable updates. But the before mentioned just makes it more unbereable the more you read. Keep it up author, it’s good work, but try to improve on the mentioned.
This is translation review, not novel review. If you are not familiar with it, webnovel has started westernizing most of the novels in 2021. This is awful practice that kills original novel. At best you get only names, places and organizations westernized and at worst you get half novel gutted and other half totally rewritten by translator. With best case scenario you get only names, places and organizations westernized which introduces plotholes cause while names are westernized, actual writing and character culture arent. You get chinese way of thinking, chinese places and organizations translated into most famous western (USA) alternatives and as a result you see absurdity.And with the worth case scenario, you are not actually reading original authors work, but some "translators" plagiarization cause half novel is removed (sometimes critical explanations) and other half is badly rewritten. And cause this requires so much work compared to normal translation, either webnovel is stealing original authors work and rewriting it (cause most of those novels dont come from qidian) or they are just using translators that dont know chinese so they are rewriting story with help of MTL (seen too many edited MTL translations lately on webnovel). overall any westernized novel deserves automatic 1 star review.
decent story but the chapters are published out of order a few times making it uninteresting to read. so don't bother trying to open it.....
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The pacing of the story is quite slow, but i do like that they harnessed a new kind of energy, The writing quality is superb and the premise is excellent overall it's a good read, Keep up the good work author! Kudos to you!
As far as novels on this site go, this one is a rough diamond. It's quality and storytelling are a step above many others. All the author needs is time and practice now... and potentially a mass edit once he becomes better at English.Here's my 5 star review, Author. Hopefully this will bring more readers. The rest is up to you.If you're looking to improve, I'd say you should work on "showing" instead of "telling." The early chapters offer a lot of in-depth insight into every character, but it interrupts their actions and hurts the smooth plot progression. It also makes the chapters seem shorter and uneventful. Instead, display their emotions through their actions, and their thoughts through their spoken words to other characters.I love what you are doing with the mute, slave-girl. Because she can't speak the characters have to get creative, meaning it's more fun to read. Plus, she's very mysterious so long as that communication and knowledge gap is maintained. I like it.Good luck.
to tell you the truth readers.. This is definitely not recommend novel because the writing quality Is so worse even me that has almost 4 years reading experience Chinese,Japanese, english novel i already experience it how terrible Chinese translation are... This novel is worse than Chinese novel it seem 16 years old maybe or lower maybe write it and just quite new at english language. And i hate quite story development because it was so fast as if the heaven helping him or lets just say in Chinese Novels "World Law" as if he was heaven child and i hate system too... because it came from the system power he was just like low exercise and get multiple ℅ strength i mean it came from system power and even knowledge why don't you just give him op knowledge like level 1 dont have knowledge suddenly have heaven defying knowledge because of unknow encounter even people didn't know ya know what i mean i will not explain anymore because it was wasting my knowledge even it can only last 24 chapter as if this is masterpiece but not really because of the writing quality