As far as novels on this site go, this one is a rough diamond. It's quality and storytelling are a step above many others. All the author needs is time and practice now... and potentially a mass edit once he becomes better at English.Here's my 5 star review, Author. Hopefully this will bring more readers. The rest is up to you.If you're looking to improve, I'd say you should work on "showing" instead of "telling." The early chapters offer a lot of in-depth insight into every character, but it interrupts their actions and hurts the smooth plot progression. It also makes the chapters seem shorter and uneventful. Instead, display their emotions through their actions, and their thoughts through their spoken words to other characters.I love what you are doing with the mute, slave-girl. Because she can't speak the characters have to get creative, meaning it's more fun to read. Plus, she's very mysterious so long as that communication and knowledge gap is maintained. I like it.Good luck.
