Short chapters. it would've been fine if it weren't for fillers taking most of the chapters. the story is decent but again, there's too many fillers for the story to progress
So far so good, to me the story is above average.I like the concept of the story but the execution of it is below average. Certain things are rushed and the author tries to build an air I mystery but he did a bad job at it.The tension is less as the character descriptions. But the concept is very good and it hooks a reader wanting to read more about what will happen next.
Mandatory shameless author review here: It's a great story with a realistic approach to the cultivation world. There may be a bit of faceslapping, a bit of humor and a bit of crying, but all of it will be done in a way that's not ridiculously obvious and annoying! The overarching story has already been planned from start to end, but how events play out can be influenced by readers feedback so feel free to leave comments on chapters telling what you like or dislike. Either way, it's not a directionless novel going randomly from one arc to the next. Each arc is important, and seemingly mundane characters and events from random chapters may come back as larger twists later so keep an eye out and feel free to theorize how the characters will play an important role later :)
There's a huge loophole in this novel.. if his wife truely bound by life contract at least they put something or protect him so they won't die .. it doesn't make sense they only put Julia and butler guy ..They're Goddess from there perspective continent and yet they can't put at least 8 tier .old man. To keep him safe ..
A very interested story, my love for it is ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤
This is pretty good, nothing crazy and you can tell some of dialogue is inspired by anime or something but it's not to the point where it's annoying to read. A lot of common tropes but they're done reasonably well.
I like the mc and the development for him but the grammar isn’t the best tbh if you just fix these little errors it would be better.
The MCs cheat is a system, one of its perks at the lowest level is .05 Chinese renminbi per breath taken. Converting the cheat into real numbers that, unless the author is a f’cking idiot, should be accurate. .05Y/$ per breath taken. 17,000-30,000 breaths per day, resting or light walking. Moderate exercise for an hour, 50,000, multiple hours, 50-78,000. 17K=850Y/$, 30K=1,500Y/$. 50K=2,500Y/$. 78K=3,900Y/$. A relatively cheap restaurant experience, ie a chipotle burrito or a hamburger from chili’s, would be 20Y-40Y in China, while it’d be roughly 15-20$ in America. Even the lowest amount is 850Y/Day. 3 meals means it’s 790 a day. Basic utilities for a 1000sqft apartment, 400-500Y, Internet is another 100Y. 600Y. That means in one day he has paid a months utilities and food plus 190Y extra. Even in the city center the nice apartments are only 4,000Y, so in 4-5Days, eating out every meal, he has his months rent. 6 days max he has the apartment, Internet, utilities covered perfectly, make it 7 days for mobile phone and the months transportation expenses. With the rest of the money he can buy branded Nike shoes or leather business shoes, every day. New jeans and a T-shirt every day if he doesn’t get shoes. New sports jacket every day without shoes or other clothes. New kitchen appliances etc etc. this is with the LOWEST breath level. The absolute lowest. You are basically set for life to never work again, near unlimited new clothing, unlimited purchasing of anything really, all the games, all the mobile purchases, anything. Heck, just throw this money into stocks at random and you’ll eventually have so much money the rest of the system just does matter. Let’s put it like this, easily get 1,500Y per day, that’s 187 per hour. In America, let’s go that the buying power is half. So imagine making at minimum 93.75$ an hour, in an hour day. That’s 45,000$ a month. 540,000$ per year. You could literally buy ANYTHING you want.
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Was looking for a good novel to read when I saw this. I actually clicked on it because the cover reminded me a tbate so that was kinda cool. Anyway it's an enjoyable novel and i recommend it to others!
it's not horrible but the author definitely needs to get an editor to go over the chapters. the grammar isn't unreadable but it's still pretty bad.
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