Honestly the number of things wrong with this story outnumber the mountains in Bhutan. The most important problem would be the lack of creativity. By reading just the first 10 chapters you can see this is like any other lord survival game which is released or featured bi-weekly. There has been no improved plot or any innovative or new aspects introduced to this type of book they constantly release.
There were some non-cliche parts, such as the female lead being so direct with her feelings, which is kinda fresh. However it still has alot of fillers.
cant wait till he starts selling pills to rich people and cures cancer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What a great story and I love Biako with dis Hus undead stuff, d same way I love his other work, 'Rise of the undead legion'. D story line is good and d characters are great and I hope at d end he wld be able to continue dis novel bcos I so much enjoy it.
this is a really good story the only problem is that its been a month since the last chapter was updated so if you want to read it your gonna be awile between chapters other then that its a good story
ELeven new chapters has came out today hope you enjoy them spend a lot of time last night to write down and publish harder than you thing anyway have a good day.
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This could be a really good story. I do love the concept, but the execution has not been that great. Granted, I am only about 30+ chapters into the story, but this is enough to give me pause about a number of issues. 1) Next to no character development from anyone. Even the MC at the very beginning didn't really have much emotion one way or the other when finding out he died and has been reborn with a system. 2) The MC is all about getting along with others when it is little girls, but is kill them all when it comes to anybody else. He does not take into consideration his followers feelings at all and just says 'get over it'. His subordinates have major issues with humans as they have killed the families of nearly everyone they know and the MC just does not care. Granted, this could be because he was human originally but it comes across as a little kid sticking his fingers in his ears while screaming, "Lalalalala!!! I can't hear you" so that he does not have to deal with the situation. 3)the MC is a pretty big pervert. While it never explicitly states how old the MC is, I get the impression of someone who is at least late 20s or older. Because he is a tree now, he thinks its perfectly okay to ogle 2 little girls who are bathing in the lake. From the wording of the chapters, I was under the impression of 10-11 year olds who looked like they were 13-14 years old. I might be wrong, but that is how it came across to me. 4)The grammar is not great. I would have to go back and reread certain sections a few times until I could finally piece together the meaning of the sentence. 5) I noticed that the author made it a pay to read starting at chapter 43. I am having issues getting through to chapter 33 without any real story or character development. I refuse to pay to read the rest of this. 6) There is no real guideline on how the MC can actually improve himself. What I mean by this, is that at the end of the very linear growth (at least where I am at), the system says he now needs to evolve. That is all well and good, but a chapter or two later, the MC decides to strengthen his roots and become immune to fire. At what point did the MC have the ability to perform this. It seemed to crop out of nowhere.I think this is all I have for right now. Again, I feel like this could be a really great story concept, but a number of issues need to be addressed.
The story is becoming more and more interesting with the insertion of cultural elements of the epic Chinese ethnic groups that we Westerners do not know, the narrative becomes more interesting to each chapter, I am looking forward to each new chapter.
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