It's great story.... Keep up work. Keep less filler chapters................................................................................
The Xiang Butterfly of Chaos is a cultivation based story, that gives a glimpse into how pretentious the cultivation world can be, a young girl ventures into the world of cultivation based on what she had heard about it from her brother, there she discovers that the cultivation world isn't what everyone thinks it is, instead it is one shrouded by deception and danger. The young girl continues to discover so many things about the world she is in and the people that she met along the way while on the path of cultivation.
Tbh i like the novel a lot. op mc ,new bloodline awesome background story with many reveals as the story progresses...funny stuff and awesome battles ..moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
The entire sentence structure is a mess. I wasn't even able to read through the first paragraph. The author really needs to correct the sentences. I am not trying to be a grammar Nazi. I am simply saying to correct the sentence structure, make it readable please. Add colon's, quotation marks, paragraph breaks etc. The style of writing choosen is 3rd person narrative, but it kinda goes around the curve on most sentences. I am looking forward to see where this goes, if the author cleans up.
Can we talk about how distinct these voices are? Because I swear I could tell who was speaking without looking at the dialogue tags. Wen Ning's dialogue is pure performance: 'Brother Luo, you're here. Mingyue's wrist is injured, and I'm afraid she can't cook, so I made some buns and brought them over for you. Am I disturbing your meal?' That's not a question— that's a loaded weapon wrapped in silk. Every word is calculated. And then later when she 'pretended to be frightened and choked' about the wasted food? Classic. She's playing the victim so well you'd almost believe it if you hadn't just seen her twist Chen Xiaodong's shoulder. Jiang Mingyue's voice is completely different—terse, sharp, increasingly detached. 'I'm tired, I don't want to argue with animals, you can chat as a family.' That line is a mic drop. And her conversation with the political commissar? 'Political commissar, please sign our divorce application.' Not a plea. Not an argument. A request, delivered with the calm of someone who has already made up their mind. Luo Mingzhong's dialogue is the most revealing because it shows his blindness: 'Was she trying to force himself to apologize by playing hard to get?' He literally cannot conceive that she means it. And the old lady—'Don't call me Grandma, I don't have a grandson like you who is blind and heartless.' That's not just dialogue, that's a verdict. Each character's way of speaking tells us everything about where they stand in this family war.
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Absolutely love it! I can't explain why I love it without spoiling, but this is a definite should read!The world background is laid out perfectly without interrupting the flow of the story, the development of the story is excellent, and the writing quality is wonderful. I love the main character, and it's not even that far into the story yet!This novel is easy to read and has a fascinating plot!
This is so good, why is it so underrated!!!MIt is way too good!!!!!!!You must read!!!!!!!!!!!Support author!!!!!!!Reject humanity, return to Monke!!!??
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As of this review, only 14 chapters have been posted. Writing quality—not the best, but definitely not the worst. If I had to compare it to other original works on this site, it probably ranks somewhere around the middle of the spectrum. There are mistakes, but it’s nothing the author can’t fix with a good amount of editing. Quite readable. A story which focuses on an elderly or veteran person is not an original concept, but it is definitely a rare one; this story centres around a German grandma—Flora Fluss—who was an engineer in her heyday. Here we get to see what happens when a workaholic retires from her highly demanding job and finds another platform to invest her time in. She’s got an obsession with perfection—as do many others in her profession—and this causes many shenanigans to occur, and because of her rather logical and somehow persuasive personality, everybody seems to be swept by her pace.As I am not an engineer or an elderly person bored out of her mind, I found it hard to relate to the character. Nonetheless, Flora is quite charming with her old-lady behaviour and deep passion over her projects. The toaster part adds to the charm, and I, as a reader, could not help but wonder what other mayhem she would cause. After all, a senior citizen can cause plenty of havoc—and nobody can stop them! Because that would be rude! One should respect the elders! I can somehow imagine Flora manipulating the ‘elderly’ card to get her way...Moving on, the author writes in a relatively convincing style, to the point where even if the author was bull****ting, I wouldn’t have noticed it. Case in point is the very long character creation arc, whereby the character, Flora, spends several in-game days to modify and rebuild her avatar from scratch. It was very draggy, but it seems to be a necessary part of the story as it laid the foundations of Flora’s character as a whole, and also show what she is capable of given time and tools. Personally, I found that some parts of it seemed too convenient, but this can be argued that the ‘convenience’ is attributed to Flora’s decades of experience—she is supposed to be a retired engineer, and we all know that retired professionals are a treasure trove of experience and expertise. Though the format of LitRPG is better suited to other sites (eg RoyalRoad, ScribbleHub, etc) since they actually have the proper writing tools suited to the genre, I find that (as a layman) the information related to the stats did not seem as important as it did not disrupt my reading even if I skim past them (or omit them entirely). I would suggest the author to tone down the technical stuffs to make more space for Flora’s other mischiefs and wholesome content, but that would take away a whole chunk of characterisation as the story seems to be focusing on her ability to create or repurpose items in-game. All in all, it was an okay story. Rough around the edges, but a good read nonetheless. Keep up the good work, author, and don’t stop writing if you can help it. Good luck!
This story is very enjoyable to read. I really like vrmmo novels and this is something different and I can't wait to read more of it.Keep up the good work author and keep writing. =^-^=